作业帮想请会的人帮忙批改一下四级作文,谢谢
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想请会的人帮忙批改一下四级作文,谢谢
这是自己写的一篇四级作文想请有能力的人帮忙批改一下,谢谢
Volinteers Needed
Boys and girls please pay your attention to this imformation. Our school's student union is going to organize a activity and you will as a volunteer join us .we are looking for volunteer and we hope you can take part in this activity when we take vocation.
We arrange this activity not only let we to do some meaningful things but also it will exercise our compentency . If you take part in this activity you can harvest a lot of experiences. It meaningful for us to do work in the future. We will to help lonely old people and wash away those bad adversary on the wall and so on.
If you want to join us please call me :135168. We are looking forward to you can join us ,we welcome every body.
这是自己写的一篇四级作文想请有能力的人帮忙批改一下,谢谢
Volinteers Needed
Boys and girls please pay your attention to this imformation. Our school's student union is going to organize a activity and you will as a volunteer join us .we are looking for volunteer and we hope you can take part in this activity when we take vocation.
We arrange this activity not only let we to do some meaningful things but also it will exercise our compentency . If you take part in this activity you can harvest a lot of experiences. It meaningful for us to do work in the future. We will to help lonely old people and wash away those bad adversary on the wall and so on.
If you want to join us please call me :135168. We are looking forward to you can join us ,we welcome every body.
第一段第二句我觉得可以写成 The student union of our school will organize an activity in recent days and you can join us as volunteers.第二段第一句 This activity will not only let you do something meaningful but also extend your compentency.有一些语法错误,比如 will ,let 后面是要跟原形的,不加to 多用一些短语,比如If you want to join us=If you have an intention to join us 希望这些能对你有用,继续加油吧~