作业帮求英语大神帮我改改托福作文~
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求英语大神帮我改改托福作文~
Nowadays,along with the augment of socialcompetition,an increasing number of parents choose to send their children tothe extra course for improving children' ability,such as music,art,math,science,history and language.Indeed,the extra course would help childrenimprove their capacity,but,taking the disadvantages that the extra coursebrings about to the kids into account,I believe that its merits outweigh itsdisadvantages.
The extra course would deprive a preciouschildhood from children.As we all know,hardly a kid likes to go to thiscourse when s/he off class,especially when s/he found that otherchildren is playing.In this process,s/he may lose many chances tocommunicate with her/his peers.As a result,what the parents leave forchildren's memory is study and pain.It is a perfect and colorful childhoodthat will exert a profound and favorable influence on kids' future developmentto establish optimistic personality.Without those memories,children will becomemore and more pessimistic and lack of interpersonal skill.
Moreover,extra courses may be not workedas parents wanted.When a guy is compelled to do something,the result of thatnormally is inferior.As the old saying goes that interest is the best teacher.When children encounter the problem that their parents command them to go tostudy the things that they don't like,children would express some kind ofattitude towards the courses that drop it.Consequently,even if they could togo those classes physically,their mind may hand out with their friends.
In addition,many parents send theirchildren to the extra course mainly because they found other parents do it.Parents are afraid of their children that will lose competitiveness when otherkids get the chance for improvement and their children are playing computergames at home.This sense of insecurity is so common in the work place,justlike your boss always talk to one of your co-worker and at this moment; youwould engender this kind of feeling that you would lose something.In fact,theboss may just arrange some extra tasks to your co-worker and he is suffering.So parents should delete this wrong feeling from their mind.
All in all,we cannot deny the fact thatmany children get the achievement through taking extra courses.However,wealso cannot contradict the fact that those children lose so many things intheir way to success,at least a happy childhood,which is invaluable treasurefor everyone.So I firmly believe that children need a free holiday rather thana busy weekend.
Nowadays,along with the augment of socialcompetition,an increasing number of parents choose to send their children tothe extra course for improving children' ability,such as music,art,math,science,history and language.Indeed,the extra course would help childrenimprove their capacity,but,taking the disadvantages that the extra coursebrings about to the kids into account,I believe that its merits outweigh itsdisadvantages.
The extra course would deprive a preciouschildhood from children.As we all know,hardly a kid likes to go to thiscourse when s/he off class,especially when s/he found that otherchildren is playing.In this process,s/he may lose many chances tocommunicate with her/his peers.As a result,what the parents leave forchildren's memory is study and pain.It is a perfect and colorful childhoodthat will exert a profound and favorable influence on kids' future developmentto establish optimistic personality.Without those memories,children will becomemore and more pessimistic and lack of interpersonal skill.
Moreover,extra courses may be not workedas parents wanted.When a guy is compelled to do something,the result of thatnormally is inferior.As the old saying goes that interest is the best teacher.When children encounter the problem that their parents command them to go tostudy the things that they don't like,children would express some kind ofattitude towards the courses that drop it.Consequently,even if they could togo those classes physically,their mind may hand out with their friends.
In addition,many parents send theirchildren to the extra course mainly because they found other parents do it.Parents are afraid of their children that will lose competitiveness when otherkids get the chance for improvement and their children are playing computergames at home.This sense of insecurity is so common in the work place,justlike your boss always talk to one of your co-worker and at this moment; youwould engender this kind of feeling that you would lose something.In fact,theboss may just arrange some extra tasks to your co-worker and he is suffering.So parents should delete this wrong feeling from their mind.
All in all,we cannot deny the fact thatmany children get the achievement through taking extra courses.However,wealso cannot contradict the fact that those children lose so many things intheir way to success,at least a happy childhood,which is invaluable treasurefor everyone.So I firmly believe that children need a free holiday rather thana busy weekend.
第一段：If I were the cup, I would be the cup which were full.in care I want to come true the dream which is belong myself.Although it's diffcult to true for me,but I'm unwilling to be a cup of half or less than it.第二段：Right now, I am going through the most difficult period of my life. I have to pass the examination for I want to go to Beijing University that is the best one in Chine. I know it is a hard job for me, but I am a "cup of full" and brave enough to overcome every difficulty and grasp every opportunity which I face.第三段：I believe that I will be a man of sucessful, because I decide to challenge life of myself.房主从这些简单句型练习吧,我随手写的,做参考,楼主的文章看得我头疼,拜托你想表达什么?中心在哪里先写出来,用复杂到别人都厌恶,还犯错那就逆天了
再问： 怎么像是口语的= =大侠~
再答： 我⊙﹏⊙b汗，你想咋样？简单易懂又有深度，不知道你的追求！
再问： 我想说哦~作文这样写不好吧~毕竟是书面语~ 你给我的这个真心像是口语第一题额~ 有没有什么书面一点的啊~
再答： 加工一下就好了嘛~~变通：If being the cup, I would be it fulling.In care I want to come true the dream belonging myself.Although it's diffcult to true,but I'm unwilling being of half or less than it.第二段：Right now, I am going through the most difficult period of my life. having to pass the examination for I want to go to Beijing University that is the best one in China. I know it is a hard job, but I am a "cup of full" and brave enough to overcome every difficulty and grasp every opportunity which I face.第三段：Believeing will be a man of sucessful, because I decide to challenge life of myself。不要小看口语好不？你以为书面语是从哪里来的啊？英国人一早就有书面语么？还不是从口语延展而来的！！口语还是最常用的呢~一篇文章不在于你用了多少高级句型，也不在乎用了多少高级 词汇，只要做到了句子的句意拥有了灵魂，他的含义不仅仅局限于普通的想法，而且语言生动活泼，引人入胜，有涵养（当然谚语是最佳的选择，一个国家的语言最丰富最有趣的就是谚语啦），这样的文章才算是好文章，有中心思想（经常在第一段表明）有论证（中间）有结论（结尾），语法不易出错，而且没有肤浅的句型（通俗与特别秉承），这样才是好文章啊！
再问： 怎么像是口语的= =大侠~
再答： 我⊙﹏⊙b汗，你想咋样？简单易懂又有深度，不知道你的追求！
再问： 我想说哦~作文这样写不好吧~毕竟是书面语~ 你给我的这个真心像是口语第一题额~ 有没有什么书面一点的啊~
再答： 加工一下就好了嘛~~变通：If being the cup, I would be it fulling.In care I want to come true the dream belonging myself.Although it's diffcult to true,but I'm unwilling being of half or less than it.第二段：Right now, I am going through the most difficult period of my life. having to pass the examination for I want to go to Beijing University that is the best one in China. I know it is a hard job, but I am a "cup of full" and brave enough to overcome every difficulty and grasp every opportunity which I face.第三段：Believeing will be a man of sucessful, because I decide to challenge life of myself。不要小看口语好不？你以为书面语是从哪里来的啊？英国人一早就有书面语么？还不是从口语延展而来的！！口语还是最常用的呢~一篇文章不在于你用了多少高级句型，也不在乎用了多少高级 词汇，只要做到了句子的句意拥有了灵魂，他的含义不仅仅局限于普通的想法，而且语言生动活泼，引人入胜，有涵养（当然谚语是最佳的选择，一个国家的语言最丰富最有趣的就是谚语啦），这样的文章才算是好文章，有中心思想（经常在第一段表明）有论证（中间）有结论（结尾），语法不易出错，而且没有肤浅的句型（通俗与特别秉承），这样才是好文章啊！