作业帮哪位老师帮我改改英语作文,
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哪位老师帮我改改英语作文,
Run as Forrest Gump
Running is not only a speed,but also an attitude.
In the beginning of the film 《Forrest Gump》,Forrest had no sooner was bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.Maybe you think he is a coward.In my opinion,It is not dare to face difficulties,but a kind of way to solve the problem.I believed that it is a wise man’s behavior.
It reminds me of case that I was in difficulties and I always avoid facing the thing that I have not enough confidence to finish.In a word,I always shrink back when facing difficulties.For example,these day of prepared for CET-3,I had a plan for myself everyday,include before sleep and after wake up,but I have not beaten my sleepiness in night.And I should have got up early to memorize words,but it was so cold that I was unwilling to do it.I always can’t be like Forrest Gump,who can always run ahead of difficulties when meeting them.I shall tell myself that I should run as Forrest Gump.
In the movie war,Forrest in spite of his live,running as a superman to saved his best friend.And he also saved many soldiers.
In our daily life,everyone has friends who always together with us.What’s more,we maybe sleep in a bed together.However,If she was in dangerous,could you regardless yourself live to save her?I am afraid I will hesitate.So from since today I must learn that run as Forrest Gump for my friends.
The last part of film,Because of the heroine who leaved him,he kept on running everyday and followed the sunrise and sunset.I think he is in the pursuit of his eternal.He didn’t stop until the heroine came back.
How many things that I want to finished.However,how long I continued.Study,dream,I don’t think I persist in them.At my junior high school,I want to be a costume designer in the future.Because of my parents who have not agreed me to join in art class,I have to give up.I dreamed to be a Chinese teacher when I was a high school student.But the third year when I found I couldn’t pass the examination undergraduate so I gave up my dream again.Today,I major in International Nursing,It is firmly that I will to be a beautiful nurse.
Run as Forrest Gump.Obviously,a bright future is awaiting me.
Run as Forrest Gump
Running is not only a speed,but also an attitude.
In the beginning of the film 《Forrest Gump》,Forrest had no sooner was bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.Maybe you think he is a coward.In my opinion,It is not dare to face difficulties,but a kind of way to solve the problem.I believed that it is a wise man’s behavior.
It reminds me of case that I was in difficulties and I always avoid facing the thing that I have not enough confidence to finish.In a word,I always shrink back when facing difficulties.For example,these day of prepared for CET-3,I had a plan for myself everyday,include before sleep and after wake up,but I have not beaten my sleepiness in night.And I should have got up early to memorize words,but it was so cold that I was unwilling to do it.I always can’t be like Forrest Gump,who can always run ahead of difficulties when meeting them.I shall tell myself that I should run as Forrest Gump.
In the movie war,Forrest in spite of his live,running as a superman to saved his best friend.And he also saved many soldiers.
In our daily life,everyone has friends who always together with us.What’s more,we maybe sleep in a bed together.However,If she was in dangerous,could you regardless yourself live to save her?I am afraid I will hesitate.So from since today I must learn that run as Forrest Gump for my friends.
The last part of film,Because of the heroine who leaved him,he kept on running everyday and followed the sunrise and sunset.I think he is in the pursuit of his eternal.He didn’t stop until the heroine came back.
How many things that I want to finished.However,how long I continued.Study,dream,I don’t think I persist in them.At my junior high school,I want to be a costume designer in the future.Because of my parents who have not agreed me to join in art class,I have to give up.I dreamed to be a Chinese teacher when I was a high school student.But the third year when I found I couldn’t pass the examination undergraduate so I gave up my dream again.Today,I major in International Nursing,It is firmly that I will to be a beautiful nurse.
Run as Forrest Gump.Obviously,a bright future is awaiting me.
第一段：
1.Forrest had no sooner was bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.应改为No sooner had Forrest been bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.
No sooner.than... 是一个典型的部分倒装句型,no sooner引导的从句要倒装,than引导的从句不用倒装.
2. In my opinion,It is not dare to face difficulties, but a kind of way to solve the problem.应改为In my opinion, it's a kind of way to solve the problem, although it's not a brave one.
It is not dare to face difficulties这句话有明显的语法错误.dare只能作动词或名词,并没有形容词的词性,所以不存在be dare to do sth.的表达.
3.I believed that it is a wise man’s behavior.这句话是明显的中国式英语,应该要换一种表达方式.可以改为：I believe that's a wise way.(a wise way 指的是前面提到的he turned back and keep running）
再问： 谢谢。不过还麻烦您帮我看仔细点，自认为错误有很多，虽然我自己改不出来。
再答： 总体来说，没有掌握好使用从句的度，在许多不必要的地方使用了从句，使句子过于冗长。适当使用短句能够更清楚地表达意思。 还有，一个句子里尽量只使用一个逗号，最多不要超过两个，如果想表达的意思比较长，可以使用多个短句，内容里有所衔接就可以了。 建议您先尝试将一些句子缩减或分成几个句子，然后再修改语法。 希望对您有帮助，谢谢！O(∩_∩)O
1.Forrest had no sooner was bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.应改为No sooner had Forrest been bullied at his school than he turned back and keep running.
No sooner.than... 是一个典型的部分倒装句型,no sooner引导的从句要倒装,than引导的从句不用倒装.
2. In my opinion,It is not dare to face difficulties, but a kind of way to solve the problem.应改为In my opinion, it's a kind of way to solve the problem, although it's not a brave one.
It is not dare to face difficulties这句话有明显的语法错误.dare只能作动词或名词,并没有形容词的词性,所以不存在be dare to do sth.的表达.
3.I believed that it is a wise man’s behavior.这句话是明显的中国式英语,应该要换一种表达方式.可以改为：I believe that's a wise way.(a wise way 指的是前面提到的he turned back and keep running）
再问： 谢谢。不过还麻烦您帮我看仔细点，自认为错误有很多，虽然我自己改不出来。
再答： 总体来说，没有掌握好使用从句的度，在许多不必要的地方使用了从句，使句子过于冗长。适当使用短句能够更清楚地表达意思。 还有，一个句子里尽量只使用一个逗号，最多不要超过两个，如果想表达的意思比较长，可以使用多个短句，内容里有所衔接就可以了。 建议您先尝试将一些句子缩减或分成几个句子，然后再修改语法。 希望对您有帮助，谢谢！O(∩_∩)O