作业帮求高手帮我指出下我写的作文中的不恰当的地方,
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求高手帮我指出下我写的作文中的不恰当的地方,
My dear friend,
1,Have you ever watched the film——the Pursuit of happyness?2,I strongly recommend you to watch it,if you never do it.
3,The film tells a story that a tough salesman constantly pursuits a happy life ,revealing the character of persistence,love and optimism.4,It displays numerous moving scene for the striving for a good life in his own hard right.5,In addition,the film is famous for the background ,coming from a true story.6,Therefore,there is no double that it gains many prizes and great reputation by the brilliant perfomance and strong influence.
7,Believe me and watch it.
Yours
Li Ming.
如果第2句 if you never do it.直接改成If not可以么?
第6句的That从句用一般现在时对么?
第7句的启示句这样用可以么?这可以表达出一种两人比较熟悉的关系么?
另外再请把我写的不恰当处改下.
My dear friend,
1,Have you ever watched the film——the Pursuit of happyness?2,I strongly recommend you to watch it,if you never do it.
3,The film tells a story that a tough salesman constantly pursuits a happy life ,revealing the character of persistence,love and optimism.4,It displays numerous moving scene for the striving for a good life in his own hard right.5,In addition,the film is famous for the background ,coming from a true story.6,Therefore,there is no double that it gains many prizes and great reputation by the brilliant perfomance and strong influence.
7,Believe me and watch it.
Yours
Li Ming.
如果第2句 if you never do it.直接改成If not可以么?
第6句的That从句用一般现在时对么?
第7句的启示句这样用可以么?这可以表达出一种两人比较熟悉的关系么?
另外再请把我写的不恰当处改下.
Dear friends,
Have you ever seem the film, the Pursuit of Happyness? If not, I strongly recommend you to see it.
The film comes from a true story that a tough salesman constantly pursuits a happy life, revealing the character of persistence, optimism and love. There are numerous moving scenes for him to strive for a good life in his own hard right. Because of its brilliant perfomance and strong influence, the film gains great reputation and many prizes.
So I strongly recommend it to you!
Yours
Li Ming
Have you ever seem the film, the Pursuit of Happyness? If not, I strongly recommend you to see it.
The film comes from a true story that a tough salesman constantly pursuits a happy life, revealing the character of persistence, optimism and love. There are numerous moving scenes for him to strive for a good life in his own hard right. Because of its brilliant perfomance and strong influence, the film gains great reputation and many prizes.
So I strongly recommend it to you!
Yours
Li Ming