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英语作文看我作文怎么样:Hello!Everyone!My name is (不留名了).I am(多少岁).I'm a

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英语作文
看我作文怎么样:
Hello!Everyone!My name is (不留名了).I am(多少岁).I'm a boy.I'm in Class ,Grade of school.There're 3 people in my family.They're my mother,my father and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in a school.My father is an engineer.He works in a company.I have math Chinese and English class.I like English.Because it's very fun and I like my English teacher.She's Miss Ren.She is very beautiful.She can teach us English very well.My favourite food is orange.Because it's very tasty.My favourite sport is basketball.Because it's very interesting.
This is me.
这就是我的作文,你看我写的怎么样,哪块错了给我指出.
如果让作文有亮点,该怎么写?
1 错在:I have math Chinese and English class.
应该是:I have Math,Chinese ,English and other subjects.I like Math,Chinese and English best.(这样读上去更连贯)
2 最后一句最好改成:What do you think of me?
(虽然This is me语法没错,翻译成中文也很通,但是一般不这么写)
如果要让作文有亮点,最好要有与众不同的特点或是在写作方式上多用些从句、复合句等一些超出普通水平的句子,这样才会得到赞赏.