作业帮高手帮我看看这英文日记有什么问题
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高手帮我看看这英文日记有什么问题
918
Today is a unusual day.
78 years ago Japan invaders attacked the China city of shenyang.Since then,Chinese people endured 14 years of suffering.Japan invaders took away a numerous of wealth of China,killed millions of people in our motherland...This is history,but it still alerts us that we can't seek the comfort,we must strengthen ourselves.
Of course,Japan is a developed country and we use their technology frequently,so,we also have to learn a lot from Japan,this reflects our breast.
918,my fellow citizens,don't cry...
语法、时态、用词之类等都行，最好能再给我个建议什么的，
918
Today is a unusual day.
78 years ago Japan invaders attacked the China city of shenyang.Since then,Chinese people endured 14 years of suffering.Japan invaders took away a numerous of wealth of China,killed millions of people in our motherland...This is history,but it still alerts us that we can't seek the comfort,we must strengthen ourselves.
Of course,Japan is a developed country and we use their technology frequently,so,we also have to learn a lot from Japan,this reflects our breast.
918,my fellow citizens,don't cry...
语法、时态、用词之类等都行，最好能再给我个建议什么的，
the China 的 the 去掉.沈阳拼音首字母大写.a numerous of换成sumless.killed前加and.can't seek the comfort?这一句很有问题.so前句号,S大写,其后逗号不要.this也是同样的问题.918是中文的习惯称法,英文不能直接用,可以写成今天是9月18,句号.
建议：很粗心.句子当断则断,不要都写长句.长句一篇文章中两三句就够了,多了对于你现在的水平来说容易出错.像字母大小写的错误应该在第一遍检查时就检查出来.
建议：很粗心.句子当断则断,不要都写长句.长句一篇文章中两三句就够了,多了对于你现在的水平来说容易出错.像字母大小写的错误应该在第一遍检查时就检查出来.