作业帮帮忙改一下这篇英语短文
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帮忙改一下这篇英语短文
就下面这篇,感觉里面有不少语法错误,还有的句子不太好,最好也能换一下,
be yourself
no matter who you are ,a tiny boy ,a fat girl ,we have the rights to be the person we wanna to be ,though i am short ,i like play baseketball,and i could find fun in it ,then i play,i like eat ice cream ,i do not care how many fat it contains,and i eat
so what is the most important is to be yourself like somebody said:
to singing ,like nobody listen to you
to danceing ,like nobody look at you
to love ,like never being hurt before
就下面这篇,感觉里面有不少语法错误,还有的句子不太好,最好也能换一下,
be yourself
no matter who you are ,a tiny boy ,a fat girl ,we have the rights to be the person we wanna to be ,though i am short ,i like play baseketball,and i could find fun in it ,then i play,i like eat ice cream ,i do not care how many fat it contains,and i eat
so what is the most important is to be yourself like somebody said:
to singing ,like nobody listen to you
to danceing ,like nobody look at you
to love ,like never being hurt before
the rights的the去掉
play basketball 单词错了,而且改成playing
i could find fun中式英语,而且不要用could,改成enjoy myself.then i paly感觉别扭.去掉吧.eat 也去掉吧.直接i like ice cream... how many fat->how much fat.
and i eat so what is the most important is to be yourself like somebody said:
自己根据要表达的意思改改吧.我觉得不好.你吃冰激凌就是为了想做你自己啊?
语法：如果你的本意是我这样吃冰激凌最重要的.改成the most important reason i eat ice cream is to be myself like somebody sail:.
最后几句词性要统一.loving dancing没有e.
listening looking.
写完后要自己多读读,找找语感.写和看很大区别的.平时多读下英语文章对写作很有利.
play basketball 单词错了,而且改成playing
i could find fun中式英语,而且不要用could,改成enjoy myself.then i paly感觉别扭.去掉吧.eat 也去掉吧.直接i like ice cream... how many fat->how much fat.
and i eat so what is the most important is to be yourself like somebody said:
自己根据要表达的意思改改吧.我觉得不好.你吃冰激凌就是为了想做你自己啊?
语法：如果你的本意是我这样吃冰激凌最重要的.改成the most important reason i eat ice cream is to be myself like somebody sail:.
最后几句词性要统一.loving dancing没有e.
listening looking.
写完后要自己多读读,找找语感.写和看很大区别的.平时多读下英语文章对写作很有利.