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帮忙改一下这篇英语作文
Everyone has their own dreams.Dream is the start of success.When we have a dream,the only thing we should to do is make it come ture.
I have a dream.My dream is to be a computer programmer,who can create software or computer games.I like computer.When the first time I met computer,it attracted me immediately.Of course,to be a good programmer is difficult,but I think I can make it.
Now everything I do is close to my dream.I feel my life is fill with hope and is colorful,and I have enough confidence to realize my dream.I’ll work hard for my dreams,I will never give up.
看看有没有什么语法问题
1 Everyone has (his) own dreams.everyone是单数
2 the only thing we (should do) is (to make/making)it come ture.
should接动原 句子成分问题
3 My dream is to (become) a computer programmer 个人觉得become更好些
4 Becoming a good programmer is obviously difficult,but I still believe I can make it come ture.感觉上这样更流畅些
5 Everything I do today makes me closer to my dream.同上
6 I (find my life full of hope and colorful),and I have enough confidence to (achieve) my dream.realize译为 实现 时是正式用语,作文 里最好不要用