有大侠能把这个短文修改地道点吗?

有大侠能把这个短文修改地道点吗?
Please allow me to welcome all of your Australian students who's from the university of western sydney again to come to our hospital for the clinical pratice.it's eight years since we began to cooperated with your university.this year there are 20 students to intern here.we made plans according to your university's teaching plan.to better your study and adjust yourselves to your internship.please pay attention to the followings.
Please strictly abide by relevant laws and regulations of the PRC.may not do anything illegal,otherwise you will be punished.
Respect and obey our cultures and morals.
Obey the medical safety management and relevant intern regulations.don't do anything against them.
Make your turn after the Turning tablet.Shouldn't change your departments with will.
Respect the teachers and other interns.
Don't be late or leave earlier than scheduled.if you want to ask for leave,please in written form.
all clinical practice activities must be conducted under the guidance of teachers.
The hospitals is a public place.please take good care of your valuables.the loss of the consequences of self.(be careful outside of the hospital as well)
If you break some rules of the school firstly,we will give a warning to you.If twice,we will deprive you of the right to intern in our hospital.Furthermore,we won't return the tuition."
there will be a eight-day holiday for "National day"and" Mid-Autumn day ".therefore at the beginning of your internship,many experts are in their holiday.but there will be senior residents who will guide you.you should exert your subjective initiative.moreover,our interpreter will try their best to help you.
我似乎写错了几个语法。

Please allow me to welcome all of your Australian students who are from the university of western sydney to our hospital again for the clinical pratice.It's been eight years since we began to cooperated with your university.this year there are 20 students to intern here.we made plans according to your university's teaching plan.to better your study and adjust yourselves to your internship.please pay attention to the followings.
Please strictly abide by relevant laws and regulations of the PRC.Do not do anything illegal,otherwise you will be punished.
Respect and obey our cultures and morals.
Obey the medical safety management and relevant intern regulations.
Make your turn after the Turning tablet.Shouldn't change your department at will.
Respect the teachers and other interns.
Don't be late or leave earlier than scheduled.if you want to ask for leave,it should be in written form.
all clinical practice activities must be conducted under the guidance of teachers.
The hospital is a public place.please take good care of your valuables.If any of them is lost,you yourself should bear the consequence.(be careful outside the hospital as well)
If you break some rules of the school,firstly,we will give a warning to you.If twice,we will deprive you of the right to intern in our hospital.Besides,we won't return the tuition."
there will be a eight-day holiday for "National day"and" Mid-Autumn day ".therefore at the beginning of your internship,many experts are on their holiday.but there will be senior residents to guide you.you should exert your subjective initiative.moreover,our interpreter will try their best to help you.
写都很不错,做了些小小修改.没有标注出来,楼主自己仔细看吧.