作业帮请各位帮我批改初中英语作文
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请各位帮我批改初中英语作文
要求：假如你是明明,您父亲长期在外工作,父亲节快到了,你很想念父亲,很感谢父亲给了你一个温暖的家,让你过着幸福的生活.请根据提示内容,给父亲写一封电子邮件.
注意：1.短文必须包括所有要点2.可适当发挥3.60-80字
Dear father,
How are you?Father's Day is coming soon.Are U okay this days?I miss you very much at this time of the year.I know ,because of your work and for me a better life,you have to be away from our family.But it seems that you always beside in my heart.Thank you for giving me so prefect life.I am very happy with u .You show me what is deep as sea.I will work hard to make you feel warm.
Please take good of yourself.I will always love u.
love,
Mingming
要求：假如你是明明,您父亲长期在外工作,父亲节快到了,你很想念父亲,很感谢父亲给了你一个温暖的家,让你过着幸福的生活.请根据提示内容,给父亲写一封电子邮件.
注意：1.短文必须包括所有要点2.可适当发挥3.60-80字
Dear father,
How are you?Father's Day is coming soon.Are U okay this days?I miss you very much at this time of the year.I know ,because of your work and for me a better life,you have to be away from our family.But it seems that you always beside in my heart.Thank you for giving me so prefect life.I am very happy with u .You show me what is deep as sea.I will work hard to make you feel warm.
Please take good of yourself.I will always love u.
love,
Mingming
Dear Dad（更为亲切）,
How are you these days?Father's Day is coming.(不需加soon.are u okey的确是语意有重复）l miss you very much at this special time of the year.(点明特殊时间更好）l know that you have to be away from our family because of your job.l also realize that you want to offer me a better life.（原句不是很通顺这样改我认为比较清晰~）And it seems that you are always in my mind.(用mind更好)Thank you for making my life so perfect （give一般指实在的物,不适合用在这里.）The love you show me is as deep as sea.(讲父亲对我的爱应该放在一起,然后再谈自己.）l am very happy with you.l will work hard to make you feel gratified.(欣慰的意思）
Finally,please take good care of yourself.(少了care）Remember,l always love you.（always通常是一般现在时）
Love,
Mingming
要多注意句语句之间的联系哦~加几个衔接词会使文章更紧凑.总得来说一些语句用得还不错,gogo!看在我这么辛苦的分上选我吧!
**********楼下的同学有些内容都是从我这搬过去的吧~还是自己来修改比较好~
How are you these days?Father's Day is coming.(不需加soon.are u okey的确是语意有重复）l miss you very much at this special time of the year.(点明特殊时间更好）l know that you have to be away from our family because of your job.l also realize that you want to offer me a better life.（原句不是很通顺这样改我认为比较清晰~）And it seems that you are always in my mind.(用mind更好)Thank you for making my life so perfect （give一般指实在的物,不适合用在这里.）The love you show me is as deep as sea.(讲父亲对我的爱应该放在一起,然后再谈自己.）l am very happy with you.l will work hard to make you feel gratified.(欣慰的意思）
Finally,please take good care of yourself.(少了care）Remember,l always love you.（always通常是一般现在时）
Love,
Mingming
要多注意句语句之间的联系哦~加几个衔接词会使文章更紧凑.总得来说一些语句用得还不错,gogo!看在我这么辛苦的分上选我吧!
**********楼下的同学有些内容都是从我这搬过去的吧~还是自己来修改比较好~