高手给查查小文章错误Helen Keller:“We know that one day we must die,but

高手给查查小文章错误
Helen Keller:“We know that one day we must die,but usually we picture that day as far in the picture”.Currently from the given cartoon,with the rampancy of commercial fishing,the number of fishes dramatically decreased.In one pictures,there were various kinds of fish and only one fishing-boat in 1900.On the contrary,in1995 there was only one fish,with many fishing-boats.
“Judge not according to the appearce.” It is as plain as the nose on your face to find the hidden “iceberg” of the picture— currently in some business sectors and service departments,the chase of interests is as the wind blow wherever it wishes.Some folks are impersonal as have the “Aaron’s serpent”.
“It’s time to fish or cut bait,for an inch can break square.” To serve as responsible steward of planet,firstly,legislative initiative should take a front seat,the government should not stay out of the way.One swallow does not make a summer,each of us requires to actively take part in,it is superior to hold hands and stick together.
Contrary to morality and truth ,the pursuit for “thirty pieces of silver” should not be appropriate to God’ servants.Please remember Faust’ saying:"Satan,go away."
麻烦给看看有错误吗,或者那些地方修改下更像地道的英语,谢谢马上送分

1.英语中说话不用冒号,用逗号.
2.假设你所引用的话是对的,我将原文改成如下.
3.英语是很严谨的语言,当你要写说明文或议论文的时候,就不要多用修辞.
4.举例（包括名人名言）确实是英语写作中很重要的,但作用取决于是否有详细阐述及和要点如何相关；而且在于阅读你文章的人是否理解.因为有些时候你是为了取悦你的读者的,比如老师.所以当他独到他所不明白的东西而要去翻资料的时候,会觉得很尴尬.（我承认我看不懂很多内容.）
所以当改完文章的时候发现其实并没有真正写了什么.
Helen Keller once said,“We know that one day we must die,but usually we picture that day as far in the picture.” As showed in the given cartoon,currently the number of fishes decreased dramatically resulted from the rampancy of commercial fishing.In one picture,there were only one fishing boat and various kinds of fishes in 1900.However,in 1995 there was only one fish,with many fishing boats.
“Judge not according to the appearance.” It is as plain as the nose on your face to find the hidden “iceberg” of the picture— currently pursuit of profit spread widely throughout business sectors and service departments.Some folks are impersonal as have the “Aaron’s serpent”.
“It’s time to fish or cut bait,for an inch can break square.” To serve as a responsible steward of planet,firstly,legislative initiative should take a front seat,the government should not stay out of the way.One swallow does not make a summer,each of us requires to actively take part in,it is superior to hold hands and stick together.这整段都没有连词和断句.
Contrary to morality and truth ,the pursuit for “thirty pieces of silver” should not be appropriate to God’ servants.Please remember Faust’s saying:"Satan,go away."