希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文

希望有高人帮我指点一下这篇英语短文
how many people here still use their hands to write letters until now?what changed our way of communication?today,i'd like to talk to you about the change in way of communication with the evolution of technology in human life.
over the past several thousands years,the letter has been still a most universal way between the people exchanges,we can connect with people,include our friends,family member and relative,through the letter.letter can make people who apart thousands of miles exchange information no matter what is the messager,pigeon or postman.but this way which have existed a few thousand years happened to accept a severe challenge in the past two decades.more people began to choose telephone as a way of communcation with the emergence and popularization of the telephone.however,after a little the cell phone have gradually replaced the fixed telephone and become another popular way of communication among people.at the same time,more and more people can surf the internet with the invention and popularization of computer,so people can connect with others in internet web,even with the strange person.the traditional way of communication was thoroughly changed.
from the change of communication in our life,we can see the people's life styles surely are changing with the evolution of technology.but this change is good or bad which depends on how you think.
that's all about my presentation.
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这是一篇报告，帮我改一下错误的地方，改的好可以给加分

still use their hands to write letters - still write letters by hand
until now - even now
changed - has changed
way - ways
change in way - changes in ways
life - lives
the letter has been still a most universal way between the people exchanges - correspondence has always been the most univcersal way of communication between people
connect with people - keep in contact/touch with other people
include - including
family member - family members
relative - relatives
through the letter - through correspondence
letter can make people who apart thousands of miles exchange information no matter what is the messager,pigeon or postman - With the help of correspondence,people thousands of miles apart could exchnage information via messengers,pigeons or postal workers.
but this way which have existed a few thousand years happened to accept a severe challenge in the past two decades - But in the past two decades,this traditional way of communication has gone through some severe changes.
more people began to choose telephone as a way of communcation with the emergence and popularization of the telephone.however,after a little the cell phone have gradually replaced the fixed telephone and become another popular way of communication among people.- With the popularization of the telephone,more and more began to prefer the telephone as a way of communication,especially in the cases of emergencies.And then slowly but surely,cell phones started replacing land phones as the popular way of communication.
computer - the computer
in internet - on web sites
even with the strange person - even with strangers
was thoroughly changed - has been changed completely
change - changes
communication - ways of communication
can - could
but this change is good or bad which depends on how you think.- But whether these changes are for better or for worse still depends on one's point of view.
that's all about my presentation.英文中没有这样结尾的,直接说Thank you very much.就可以了