托福综合写作评分!马上要考了!TPO12的题目

托福综合写作评分!马上要考了!TPO12的题目
TPO12综合写作,简奥斯汀画像那个,12.18就要考了呀!
In the listening material,the speaker is not in agreement with the reading material’s opinion of the portrait.He indicates that the statement in the reading passage is somewhat inaccurate and irrational when compared with what happened for real.
The first difference between the reading material and the listening material concerns the impact on the claim of Jane Austen's family.The reading passage holds an opinion that the Austen family recognized this portrait as Jane's.On the contrary,the lecturer demonstrates that when the portrait was used in the edition of Jane's letters,Jane has dead for almost 70 years.Her families at that time cannot say it for sure because they have never seen her on their own eyes.
In addition,as the reading passage states that the face of the girl in this painting is similar to Jane Austen's,whereas the speaker contends an opposite stand.He points out that the face probably belongs to one of Jane's female cousins or their children because Jane has a large family in which many of her relatives resemble her.What's more,there is a strong evidence that this portrait is likely to belong to one of her distant relative called Mary.
finally,the speaker casts doubt on the views make in the reading passage by illustrating that it is very groundless to say that the painting was drew when Jane was a teenager just because of the same style of Ozias Humphrey's works.The canvas of the painting was sold by a man called Willian and there is an evidence which can prove that he sold the canvas when Jane is already 27 years old.
拜托有经验的给点切实可行的建议，哪些地方有错误，需要修改的，哪些地方可以提高，大概能打多少分，我就要考了现在很着急~一楼不晓得在说什么呢

fair~
模板套用其实用处不大,除了读着通顺外,真材实料太少.尤其是听力,你综合写作提供的听力论据至少应该是阅读里论据的两倍以上.我第一次得fair主要原因就是一大半字数用来套模板,其实去掉模板字数根本达不到综合写作字数要求；而且阅读听力论据比一比一.第二次我就背了几个转折词保证写作结构合理语句通顺,重点放在描述听力材料上就拿到了good.这个综合写作基本还是考你听力能力和你复述的能力,语句不要和材料一模一样,不要照搬,good就没问题.
再问： 有道理，模板有凑字数的嫌疑，不过听力观点该怎样表达呢，我觉得我听力的要点已经都答到了啊，是不是要多替换一些词句，避免跟原文重复？感谢帮助啊~~~~
再答： 要点达到是必须的，其次就是需要你能够把听力原文用自己的方式复述下来，还要和阅读有呼应，一定要避免重复，挺容易的，多练练就上手了。反正你听力也没时间记下来原文，把信息点记下来然后自主发挥就成。