作业帮谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误呀!求求了.
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谁能帮我检查这段英语中的错误呀!求求了.
My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have millions of brather and sister.We have high well-knowness.Almost all the people know me---cigaretta.Many peopie love me very much.they even can't live without me.Ilive in burning.The man who buened me will cut the life down with my burning.Ican injure people with nicotine.You know,it's bad for people's body.Now,more ang more teens begin to love me.They often somke.They think it can make him more handsome.But I've worked for many years,I feel tired now.I can't bear the tiring work!Everything needs rest!So you adults must ask them not to do that again!Or they will become weak sooner.从语法 词汇 逻辑 等方面检查.答的好再加50分.
My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have millions of brather and sister.We have high well-knowness.Almost all the people know me---cigaretta.Many peopie love me very much.they even can't live without me.Ilive in burning.The man who buened me will cut the life down with my burning.Ican injure people with nicotine.You know,it's bad for people's body.Now,more ang more teens begin to love me.They often somke.They think it can make him more handsome.But I've worked for many years,I feel tired now.I can't bear the tiring work!Everything needs rest!So you adults must ask them not to do that again!Or they will become weak sooner.从语法 词汇 逻辑 等方面检查.答的好再加50分.
一行：brather and sister 应为 brothers and sisters
二行：cigaretta 应为 cigarette
三行：buened 不是词 也许是burn 罢,burns
五行：him应为them.
六行：a rest
末行：or 是连词罢..别放句首阿 叹号去了,俩句连一起!
以上是语法错误
语法错的不多,但过于单调.试着变换语序,运用倒装啥滴..
如they even can't live without me 可换为without me,they can hardly survive.
单句过多,试着将啰嗦的句子整合.
如My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have millions of brather and sister.
这是垃圾句.
整合成：Being with millions of brothers and sisters,I am a white-dressed slender full of tobbaco.
用词较基础,但不一定是坏事.
We have high well-knowness 感觉不爽..改成We are notorious as CIGARETTE to almost all the people.
逻辑比较明确..
第五行：But I've worked for many years...感觉有点突然,让人摸不着北.不知你要说啥...
二行：cigaretta 应为 cigarette
三行：buened 不是词 也许是burn 罢,burns
五行：him应为them.
六行：a rest
末行：or 是连词罢..别放句首阿 叹号去了,俩句连一起!
以上是语法错误
语法错的不多,但过于单调.试着变换语序,运用倒装啥滴..
如they even can't live without me 可换为without me,they can hardly survive.
单句过多,试着将啰嗦的句子整合.
如My body is slender.I often wear a white dress.I'm full of tobacco.I have millions of brather and sister.
这是垃圾句.
整合成：Being with millions of brothers and sisters,I am a white-dressed slender full of tobbaco.
用词较基础,但不一定是坏事.
We have high well-knowness 感觉不爽..改成We are notorious as CIGARETTE to almost all the people.
逻辑比较明确..
第五行：But I've worked for many years...感觉有点突然,让人摸不着北.不知你要说啥...