作业帮请帮我改进一*文
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请帮我改进一*文
解题思路： 理解作文要求；合理设置框架；精心组织语言；注意上下文的逻辑关系。写作时，注意句式的多样性，避免句式过于单一。多使用一些表达如：定语从句，强调句等等
解题过程：
孩子，你的扫描不太清楚，只能大体给你改一下啦。
Nowadays, I have conducted a survey on the factors that/which have a great effect on students' choices of universities after graduation.
As the chart shows,it's the key factor whether there are students' favorite majors.What's more, students always take the reputation and ranking into consideration.However,the traffic and tuition are the least important factors that students will consider.
As far as I'm concerned, the curriculum arrangement and traffic are important for me to make a decision. The reasons are as follows. First and foremost,if there are my favorite majors,I will have a passion for study and I will spare no effort to study. What's more,convenient traffic is also of great importance for me. Because I hate to waste time on the way to school.
To sum up,think twice before you act.Not only the academic atmosphere of a university but also my taste for curriculum should be taken into account.Only in this way can I have a colourful life in university.
解题过程：
孩子，你的扫描不太清楚，只能大体给你改一下啦。
Nowadays, I have conducted a survey on the factors that/which have a great effect on students' choices of universities after graduation.
As the chart shows,it's the key factor whether there are students' favorite majors.What's more, students always take the reputation and ranking into consideration.However,the traffic and tuition are the least important factors that students will consider.
As far as I'm concerned, the curriculum arrangement and traffic are important for me to make a decision. The reasons are as follows. First and foremost,if there are my favorite majors,I will have a passion for study and I will spare no effort to study. What's more,convenient traffic is also of great importance for me. Because I hate to waste time on the way to school.
To sum up,think twice before you act.Not only the academic atmosphere of a university but also my taste for curriculum should be taken into account.Only in this way can I have a colourful life in university.