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修改英语作文我们这次考试的作文写的不好所以老师叫我们交叉改作文(有两篇)请各位高手帮我下!(*^__^*) 一)某英语杂

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修改英语作文
我们这次考试的作文写的不好
所以老师叫我们交叉改作文(有两篇)
请各位高手帮我下!(*^__^*)
一)某英语杂志社“中学生专栏”在举办英语征文比赛。请你根据下表所列的内容要点,用英语Learn to smile为题写一篇短文,参加比赛。
学会对自己微笑
1.生活中会有不愉快的事,如考试不及格(请再举一个例子)
2.使你自信;
3.击败你的人有时是你自己;

学会对他人微笑
使人与人更亲近

微笑是一种语言
人人都能懂

注意:1.词数 90左右。
2.短文的开头已为你写好,不计入总词数。
3.参考词汇:自信confidence(n.),confident(adj.);打败beat.
4.短文须包括所有内容要点,不要逐字翻译,可适当发挥,使短文连贯,通顺。
我同学写的:
You know,smile is an attitude to life.please learn to smile!For example,when you uncomfortable.You need your friends.Do you want cry?No,no.You should learn to smile of life.You should learn to smile with your friends .Yes, you know.I hope you're happy.I hope
you can smile.
二)
请根据下面的四幅图及所给的四个问句,结合你自己的生活实际,以“Save Water”为题,写一篇60词左右的短文。
提示:Why must we save water?
What do we use water for?
What will happen if there is no water?
What can we do to save water?
我同学的:
We must save water!Water is people's best friend.Why must we save water?This is a fool problem!Do you want die? Our answer must"No".
So,people's life can't leave water!We need water!
TA 的英语有些差......

你们点评几句也好啊!

As you know,smile is an attitude to life.please learn to smile! --不连贯--For example,when you feel uncomfortable,you need your friends.Do you want to cry?No,no.You should learn to smile to life.You should learn to smile with your friends .I hope you're happy.I hope
you can smile.要点基本上都没表达出来, 还有写文章,要书面化,不要搞得好像两个人在对话那样
We must save water!Water is the best friend of people.Why must we save water?This is a fool problem!Do you want to die? Our answer must be"No".
So,people can't live without water!We need water!
这几个要点也没提到, What do we use water for?What can we do to save water?
可加一两句:we use water for drinking,washing,watering and so on.
等等