作业帮帮忙看下语法有没有错误!谢谢 急用
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帮忙看下语法有没有错误!谢谢 急用
Time passes away like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it won't come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering into school for the first time, but when I turned away from the memory, I realized it been a year since I entered into high school. The first time when I entered the school, I feel that this school is not pretty, yet it give me a strong felling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimate who share our joys and sorrows. My head teacher is a female, although she is very common but she has a strong affinity,. She is patient enough to teach us any problems that we cannot handle. I work as labor committee member in my class, though a little tired, but I enjoying doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
Time passes like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it won't come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering school for the first time, but when I turned away from the memory, I realized it had been a year since I entered high school. The first time I entered the school, I felt that this school was not pretty, yet it gave me a strong feeling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimates who can share our joys and sorrows. My head teacher was a female. Although she was very common, she had a strong affinity. She was patient enough to teach us to solve any problems that we cannot handle. I worked as a labor committee member in my class, Though a little tired, I enjoyed doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
这样可以么？
Time passes away like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it won't come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering into school for the first time, but when I turned away from the memory, I realized it been a year since I entered into high school. The first time when I entered the school, I feel that this school is not pretty, yet it give me a strong felling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimate who share our joys and sorrows. My head teacher is a female, although she is very common but she has a strong affinity,. She is patient enough to teach us any problems that we cannot handle. I work as labor committee member in my class, though a little tired, but I enjoying doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
Time passes like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it won't come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering school for the first time, but when I turned away from the memory, I realized it had been a year since I entered high school. The first time I entered the school, I felt that this school was not pretty, yet it gave me a strong feeling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimates who can share our joys and sorrows. My head teacher was a female. Although she was very common, she had a strong affinity. She was patient enough to teach us to solve any problems that we cannot handle. I worked as a labor committee member in my class, Though a little tired, I enjoyed doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
这样可以么？
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Time passes【去掉away更好】like a migratory bird flying south.The only difference is that it won't come back.Suddenly,I feel like an innocent child entering 【去掉into】school for the first time,but when I turned away from the memory,I realized it【had】been a year since I entered 【去掉into】high school.The first time 【去掉when】I entered the school,I 【felt】that this school 【was】not pretty,yet it 【gave】me a strong feeling of affinity.I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several 【intimates】who 【加入can更好】share our joys and sorrows.My head teacher【was】a female.【Although】she 【was】very common,【去掉but】she 【had]】a strong affinity.She 【was】patient enough to teach us【to solve】any problems that we cannot handle.I 【worked】as【加入a】labor committee member in my class,Though a little tired,【去掉but】I 【enjoyed】doing it.I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
再问： 改完是什么样的， 发一下好嘛？？？麻烦你了
再答： Time passes like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it will never come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering school for the first time, but when I turned back from the memory, I realized it had been a year since I entered high school. The first time I entered the school, I felt that this school was not pretty, yet it gave me a strong feeling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimates who can share joys and sorrows with each other. My head teacher was a female. Although she very common, she had a strong affinity. She was patient enough to teach us any problems that we couldn't handle. I worked as a labor committee member in my class, Though a little tired, I enjoyed doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future. 注：和原来改法有略微不同。
Time passes【去掉away更好】like a migratory bird flying south.The only difference is that it won't come back.Suddenly,I feel like an innocent child entering 【去掉into】school for the first time,but when I turned away from the memory,I realized it【had】been a year since I entered 【去掉into】high school.The first time 【去掉when】I entered the school,I 【felt】that this school 【was】not pretty,yet it 【gave】me a strong feeling of affinity.I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several 【intimates】who 【加入can更好】share our joys and sorrows.My head teacher【was】a female.【Although】she 【was】very common,【去掉but】she 【had]】a strong affinity.She 【was】patient enough to teach us【to solve】any problems that we cannot handle.I 【worked】as【加入a】labor committee member in my class,Though a little tired,【去掉but】I 【enjoyed】doing it.I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future.
再问： 改完是什么样的， 发一下好嘛？？？麻烦你了
再答： Time passes like a migratory bird flying south. The only difference is that it will never come back. Suddenly, I feel like an innocent child entering school for the first time, but when I turned back from the memory, I realized it had been a year since I entered high school. The first time I entered the school, I felt that this school was not pretty, yet it gave me a strong feeling of affinity. I don't think I must have a lot of friends except several intimates who can share joys and sorrows with each other. My head teacher was a female. Although she very common, she had a strong affinity. She was patient enough to teach us any problems that we couldn't handle. I worked as a labor committee member in my class, Though a little tired, I enjoyed doing it. I really love my high school life because it is full of boundless joy and I believe that I can do better in the future. 注：和原来改法有略微不同。