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一篇作文(初一水准),帮忙找下错误,顺便提下建议
My Day In Winter Vacation
Today is Wednesday, January 25th, 2006. And the Spring Festival will coming. This year, the Spring Festival is on January 29th. So, we must get ready before that day. And today, I go home at 10:00 a.m. Because I go my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival. And then, at 11:45,I eat some foods from grandparents’ home for lunch. My grandmother makes them for one night. So, they’re very tasty and nutritional. At 1:00p.m, I watch TV. All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival. At around 3:00,I start to do my homework. I eat super with my father at about 6:30 cause today we eat a lot of seafood. About 7:40,I by bike go out to play. Most of the people in the whole street are in red and very happy. They hope the Spring Festival comes quickly.
My days in winter vacation are all very happy. Because the Spring Festival will coming. It’s the symbol of the happy and health.
My Day In Winter Vacation
Today is Wednesday, January 25th, 2006. And the Spring Festival will coming. This year, the Spring Festival is on January 29th. So, we must get ready before that day. And today, I go home at 10:00 a.m. Because I go my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival. And then, at 11:45,I eat some foods from grandparents’ home for lunch. My grandmother makes them for one night. So, they’re very tasty and nutritional. At 1:00p.m, I watch TV. All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival. At around 3:00,I start to do my homework. I eat super with my father at about 6:30 cause today we eat a lot of seafood. About 7:40,I by bike go out to play. Most of the people in the whole street are in red and very happy. They hope the Spring Festival comes quickly.
My days in winter vacation are all very happy. Because the Spring Festival will coming. It’s the symbol of the happy and health.
My Day In Winter Vacation (One Day In Winter Vacation)
Today is Wednesday,January 25th,2006.And the Spring Festival will coming.(is coming up) This year,the Spring Festival is on January 29th.So,we must get ready before that day.And today,I go home at 10:00 a.m.Because I go (went to) my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival.And then,at 11:45,I eat (ate) some foods from (in) grandparents’ home for lunch.My grandmother makes (made) them for one night(day,lunch指中午饭).So,they’re(they were) very tasty and nutritional.At 1:00p.m,I watch(watched) TV.All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival.At around 3:00,I start (started) to do my homework.I eat(ate) super with my father at about 6:30 cause (because) today we eat(ate) a lot of seafood.About 7:40,I by bike go out to play.(At about 7:40,I went out to play by bike.) Most of the people in the whole street are(were) in red and very happy.They hope(hoped that) the Spring Festival comes quickly.
My days in winter vacation are (were) all very happy.Because the Spring Festival will coming(is coming up).It’s the symbol of the happy and health.
意见：
1.总的来说这便问描述了你的一天,对于初中的你能写到这样算术不算.
2.你要紧记,当你描述过去的事情或用到yesterday,last night,few weeks ago……之类的,动词或助动词要用过去式.
当你写你现在正在做事时或用到right now,at this moment……之类的,动词或助动词要用现在进行式.
当你写到未来会发生的事情,用将来式或将来进行式,例如：will,is going to……
3.在写英文句子时,在句字开头尽量少用 and,so,because,at
and 是连贯词,多用在句中,不是在句开头
例：I am sitting on the chair,chewing gum,and watching movie.
so 是因果关系连接词
例：I was so tired that I could not continue doing my work,so I went to bed automatically after I got home.
because 是因果关系连接词（在句中用的because,前面不用逗号）
例：The leaves were falling down like some green butterflies danced in the air because the wind blew very hard at the tree.
at 如果用在时间前,尽量放在句后
4.在你的英语水平提高时,尽量把两个句子或三个句子放在一句里.
例1：And today,I go home at 10:00 a.m.Because I go my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival.
可改成：I go home at 10:00 this morning because yesterday I went to my grandparents' house to take some things for the Spring Festival.
例2:And then,at 11:45,I eat some foods from grandparents’ home for lunch.My grandmother makes them for one night.So,they’re very tasty and nutritional.
可改成：I ate lunch that made by my grandmother at grandparents' house,the foods were very tasty and nutritional.
(还有,house多数指屋企,住所,房子；而home多数指家）
Today is Wednesday,January 25th,2006.And the Spring Festival will coming.(is coming up) This year,the Spring Festival is on January 29th.So,we must get ready before that day.And today,I go home at 10:00 a.m.Because I go (went to) my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival.And then,at 11:45,I eat (ate) some foods from (in) grandparents’ home for lunch.My grandmother makes (made) them for one night(day,lunch指中午饭).So,they’re(they were) very tasty and nutritional.At 1:00p.m,I watch(watched) TV.All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival.At around 3:00,I start (started) to do my homework.I eat(ate) super with my father at about 6:30 cause (because) today we eat(ate) a lot of seafood.About 7:40,I by bike go out to play.(At about 7:40,I went out to play by bike.) Most of the people in the whole street are(were) in red and very happy.They hope(hoped that) the Spring Festival comes quickly.
My days in winter vacation are (were) all very happy.Because the Spring Festival will coming(is coming up).It’s the symbol of the happy and health.
意见：
1.总的来说这便问描述了你的一天,对于初中的你能写到这样算术不算.
2.你要紧记,当你描述过去的事情或用到yesterday,last night,few weeks ago……之类的,动词或助动词要用过去式.
当你写你现在正在做事时或用到right now,at this moment……之类的,动词或助动词要用现在进行式.
当你写到未来会发生的事情,用将来式或将来进行式,例如：will,is going to……
3.在写英文句子时,在句字开头尽量少用 and,so,because,at
and 是连贯词,多用在句中,不是在句开头
例：I am sitting on the chair,chewing gum,and watching movie.
so 是因果关系连接词
例：I was so tired that I could not continue doing my work,so I went to bed automatically after I got home.
because 是因果关系连接词（在句中用的because,前面不用逗号）
例：The leaves were falling down like some green butterflies danced in the air because the wind blew very hard at the tree.
at 如果用在时间前,尽量放在句后
4.在你的英语水平提高时,尽量把两个句子或三个句子放在一句里.
例1：And today,I go home at 10:00 a.m.Because I go my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival.
可改成：I go home at 10:00 this morning because yesterday I went to my grandparents' house to take some things for the Spring Festival.
例2:And then,at 11:45,I eat some foods from grandparents’ home for lunch.My grandmother makes them for one night.So,they’re very tasty and nutritional.
可改成：I ate lunch that made by my grandmother at grandparents' house,the foods were very tasty and nutritional.
(还有,house多数指屋企,住所,房子；而home多数指家）