作业帮请教英语高手帮我修改一下英语复试自我介绍,急用,
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请教英语高手帮我修改一下英语复试自我介绍,急用,
Good afternoon,dear professors!
It is my great honor to be here for this interview.My name is xxx.I’m 23years old and I come from a very beautiful Coastal city –青岛.I'll be graduated with major of " xxx " in xxxUniversity in July 2011.Meanwhile,I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
I have been working diligently at my major.I have built up a solid foundation for professional knowledge and comprehensively improved my quality.
I am a man full of passion and enthusiasm）.Always I am interested in fresh things and I will be energetic when confronted with difficulties.I am a perseverant person.Once I set myself a goal,I will fight for it with all my efforts until the last moment.I am also an easygoing person enjoying a fine relationship with people around and at the same time,I’m also a man of teamspirit.
In my spare time,I like doing some sports and reading some news.Table tennis and jogging are my favorite sport.They keep me in good health,full of energy and breed optimism towards life.By reading news,I could know what’s going on in the society.
I have long admired XX学校because of its highly qualified faculty and strong academic environment in the field of XX专业.I am confident that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group.
People always said when you get up in the morning,you have 2 choices:(1) go on sleeping,go on dreaming; (2) get up to pursue your dream.I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream.I sincerely hope that you,dear Professors ,will grant me a chance to pursue my dream
最好能说明下为什么这么改 让我也知道个所以然...
Good afternoon,dear professors!
It is my great honor to be here for this interview.My name is xxx.I’m 23years old and I come from a very beautiful Coastal city –青岛.I'll be graduated with major of " xxx " in xxxUniversity in July 2011.Meanwhile,I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
I have been working diligently at my major.I have built up a solid foundation for professional knowledge and comprehensively improved my quality.
I am a man full of passion and enthusiasm）.Always I am interested in fresh things and I will be energetic when confronted with difficulties.I am a perseverant person.Once I set myself a goal,I will fight for it with all my efforts until the last moment.I am also an easygoing person enjoying a fine relationship with people around and at the same time,I’m also a man of teamspirit.
In my spare time,I like doing some sports and reading some news.Table tennis and jogging are my favorite sport.They keep me in good health,full of energy and breed optimism towards life.By reading news,I could know what’s going on in the society.
I have long admired XX学校because of its highly qualified faculty and strong academic environment in the field of XX专业.I am confident that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group.
People always said when you get up in the morning,you have 2 choices:(1) go on sleeping,go on dreaming; (2) get up to pursue your dream.I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream.I sincerely hope that you,dear Professors ,will grant me a chance to pursue my dream
最好能说明下为什么这么改 让我也知道个所以然...
Good afternoon, dear professors!
It is my great honor to be here for this interview. My name is xxx. I’m 23years old and I come from a very beautiful Coastal city –青岛.I'll graduate from xxxUniversity in July 2011,and my major is***. Meanwhile, I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
I have been working diligently which helps me lay a solid foundation for further study and application. I am an energetic man. Therefore I am always interested in fresh things. when facing a setback, I will take an optimistic view . I am also a perseverant person. Once I set a goal, I will fight for it with all my efforts until it is realised. Besides,I am also an easygoing person who enjoys a fine relationship with people around and at the same time, I have good communication skills and team spirit.
In my spare time, I like doing some sports and reading some news. Table tennis and jogging are my favorite sport. They keep me in good health, full of energy and breed optimism towards life. By reading news, I could know what’s going on in the society.
I have long admired XX学校because of its highly qualified faculty and strong academic environment in the field of XX专业.I am confident that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group.
People always said when you get up in the morning, you have 2 choices: (1) go on sleeping, go on dreaming; (2) get up to pursue your dream. I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream. I sincerely hope that you, dear Professors , will grant me a chance to pursue my dream
呵呵后面还没改呢,你先看看吧
再问： 你好，我刚看了一下，前面的改正都很好，谢谢了，不知道后面的还需要怎么改？能再帮忙指点下吗？
再答： In my spare time, I like doing some sports. Table tennis and jogging are my favorite. They make me healthy,energetic and holding a positive attitude towards life. In addition, I always read newspapers,which help me keep abreast of current affairs. I have long admired XX学校because of its abundant teaching resources and quality teaching and scientific research strength in XX专业。I firmly believe that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group. To sum it all up. As the saying goes: when you get up in the morning, you have 2 choices: go on sleeping, go on dreaming; or get up to pursue your dream. I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream. I sincerely hope that you, dear Professors , will open doors for me to pursue my dream. 句型有点单一，句与句间可以再加些关联词润色一下，祝你好运
It is my great honor to be here for this interview. My name is xxx. I’m 23years old and I come from a very beautiful Coastal city –青岛.I'll graduate from xxxUniversity in July 2011,and my major is***. Meanwhile, I am aiming for the continuous studies of xx专业 in XX学校.
I have been working diligently which helps me lay a solid foundation for further study and application. I am an energetic man. Therefore I am always interested in fresh things. when facing a setback, I will take an optimistic view . I am also a perseverant person. Once I set a goal, I will fight for it with all my efforts until it is realised. Besides,I am also an easygoing person who enjoys a fine relationship with people around and at the same time, I have good communication skills and team spirit.
In my spare time, I like doing some sports and reading some news. Table tennis and jogging are my favorite sport. They keep me in good health, full of energy and breed optimism towards life. By reading news, I could know what’s going on in the society.
I have long admired XX学校because of its highly qualified faculty and strong academic environment in the field of XX专业.I am confident that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group.
People always said when you get up in the morning, you have 2 choices: (1) go on sleeping, go on dreaming; (2) get up to pursue your dream. I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream. I sincerely hope that you, dear Professors , will grant me a chance to pursue my dream
呵呵后面还没改呢,你先看看吧
再问： 你好，我刚看了一下，前面的改正都很好，谢谢了，不知道后面的还需要怎么改？能再帮忙指点下吗？
再答： In my spare time, I like doing some sports. Table tennis and jogging are my favorite. They make me healthy,energetic and holding a positive attitude towards life. In addition, I always read newspapers,which help me keep abreast of current affairs. I have long admired XX学校because of its abundant teaching resources and quality teaching and scientific research strength in XX专业。I firmly believe that I am a very qualified applicant for your subject group. To sum it all up. As the saying goes: when you get up in the morning, you have 2 choices: go on sleeping, go on dreaming; or get up to pursue your dream. I'll choose the 2nd choice - to pursue my dream. I sincerely hope that you, dear Professors , will open doors for me to pursue my dream. 句型有点单一，句与句间可以再加些关联词润色一下，祝你好运