作业帮小妹跪求大家帮助我，评一评改一改我的两篇英语作文
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小妹跪求大家帮助我，评一评改一改我的两篇英语作文
杜绝非常好或不平这类话,语法错误，单词错误务必指出来，考试有帮助，我给你20分o！
（1）邀请卡
From:Chen yue
To:Miss Liu
Hello!Dear Miss Liu，how are you?It's my birthday next Saturday,I am gong to have a party at home,would you like to come?I am going to be eleven years old.If you can come,you don't bring anything,we` will start at 8:00 in the evening,we wait you in my home!
(2)介绍一个你喜欢的城市
The capital of Guangdong is Guangzhou,and of all cities in China,I like Guangzhou best.Guangzhou is a noisy and crowded city.It has a large population,more than 7 million.There are many beautiful places in Guangzhou,such as xiangjiang zoo,Baiyun Hill and so on.At night, you can go on the Pearl River cruise,you know,Guangzhou's night is beautiful.At the end of the cruise,you can see famous university.Oh,and you can eat famous Guangdong dimsum on the cruise.If you want ,don't forget to eat Guangdong soup,people in Guangzhou say soup everday.
杜绝非常好或不平这类话,语法错误，单词错误务必指出来，考试有帮助，我给你20分o！
（1）邀请卡
From:Chen yue
To:Miss Liu
Hello!Dear Miss Liu，how are you?It's my birthday next Saturday,I am gong to have a party at home,would you like to come?I am going to be eleven years old.If you can come,you don't bring anything,we` will start at 8:00 in the evening,we wait you in my home!
(2)介绍一个你喜欢的城市
The capital of Guangdong is Guangzhou,and of all cities in China,I like Guangzhou best.Guangzhou is a noisy and crowded city.It has a large population,more than 7 million.There are many beautiful places in Guangzhou,such as xiangjiang zoo,Baiyun Hill and so on.At night, you can go on the Pearl River cruise,you know,Guangzhou's night is beautiful.At the end of the cruise,you can see famous university.Oh,and you can eat famous Guangdong dimsum on the cruise.If you want ,don't forget to eat Guangdong soup,people in Guangzhou say soup everday.
我给你改正后的：【】是加的或者改的
（1）邀请卡
From:Chen yue
To:Miss Liu
Hello!Dear Miss Liu，how are you? I am gong to have 【a party this sunday to celebrate my eleven's birthday】.would you like to come 【and have fun with me?】If you can come,(如果你非不让人家带礼物的话就说) you don't need to bring anything, we` will start at 8:00 in the evening, i'm looking forward to seeing you!thanks！
sincerely(写信要有这个哦)
chen yue
（2)介绍一个你喜欢的城市
开头太仓促了...加一点东西哦~~
【My favourate city is Guangzhou.】The capital of Guangdong is Guangzhou,and of all cities in China. 【Although Guangzhou is a noisy and crowded city, i still love it】.it has a large population,more than 7 million.There are many beautiful places in Guangzhou,such as xiangjiang zoo,Baiyun Hill and so on.At night, you can go on the Pearl River cruise,【as】you know,Guangzhou's night is 【very】 beautiful.At the end of the cruise,you can see 【the】 famous university.Oh,and you can 【also】 eat famous Guangdong dimsum on the cruise.If you want ,don't forget to eat Guangdong soup,【lots of people】 in Guangzhou say soup everday.say soup???????是什么意思？
（1）邀请卡
From:Chen yue
To:Miss Liu
Hello!Dear Miss Liu，how are you? I am gong to have 【a party this sunday to celebrate my eleven's birthday】.would you like to come 【and have fun with me?】If you can come,(如果你非不让人家带礼物的话就说) you don't need to bring anything, we` will start at 8:00 in the evening, i'm looking forward to seeing you!thanks！
sincerely(写信要有这个哦)
chen yue
（2)介绍一个你喜欢的城市
开头太仓促了...加一点东西哦~~
【My favourate city is Guangzhou.】The capital of Guangdong is Guangzhou,and of all cities in China. 【Although Guangzhou is a noisy and crowded city, i still love it】.it has a large population,more than 7 million.There are many beautiful places in Guangzhou,such as xiangjiang zoo,Baiyun Hill and so on.At night, you can go on the Pearl River cruise,【as】you know,Guangzhou's night is 【very】 beautiful.At the end of the cruise,you can see 【the】 famous university.Oh,and you can 【also】 eat famous Guangdong dimsum on the cruise.If you want ,don't forget to eat Guangdong soup,【lots of people】 in Guangzhou say soup everday.say soup???????是什么意思？