作业帮谁能帮我检查一下这篇作文啊,有什么错误跟我说一下,
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谁能帮我检查一下这篇作文啊,有什么错误跟我说一下,
文章中间,She has many fish and salad,too.请问你想表达的是Also,she likes fish and salad.
讲到学校规则那里有点唐突了,可以改成But In the school,she can't do anything.She has some school rules.
可以再加一个结尾：I like her very much.We are forever（永远的） friends.
语句很通顺,也没有拼写错误,但是不够出彩,可以学一些变化句型.如：She has short curly hair.And she has a round face--She has short curly hair with a round face.
如果是考场作文,大约扣1-2分,在我们这里.
再问： 非常感谢
讲到学校规则那里有点唐突了,可以改成But In the school,she can't do anything.She has some school rules.
可以再加一个结尾：I like her very much.We are forever（永远的） friends.
语句很通顺,也没有拼写错误,但是不够出彩,可以学一些变化句型.如：She has short curly hair.And she has a round face--She has short curly hair with a round face.
如果是考场作文,大约扣1-2分,在我们这里.
再问： 非常感谢