作业帮2011安徽江南十校二模英语作文,求打分
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2011安徽江南十校二模英语作文,求打分
题目在这里：
我的作文：Dear Lihong,Your letter reached me this morning.Now I'd like to share my opinion with you.The phenomenon does exist that one may become a poor English learner in the high school.However,most of the poor learners are those who have been performing badly on English from the junior school.Therefore,just believe in yourself,cast away your fears and build up the confidence to learn English well.I suggest you make full use of your time to review what you have learned in the junior school before staring your further education.In addition,by reciting some articles in textbooks,you can develop a good sense on English,which is so helpful throughout language learning.Last but not least,it also benefits a lot if you actively use English in your daily life frequently.Sincerely hoping you can benefit from the above and will be a successful high-school English learner.Best wishes!Yours,Bruce请按照满分25分打分,
分数少了可以再加
题目在这里：
我的作文：Dear Lihong,Your letter reached me this morning.Now I'd like to share my opinion with you.The phenomenon does exist that one may become a poor English learner in the high school.However,most of the poor learners are those who have been performing badly on English from the junior school.Therefore,just believe in yourself,cast away your fears and build up the confidence to learn English well.I suggest you make full use of your time to review what you have learned in the junior school before staring your further education.In addition,by reciting some articles in textbooks,you can develop a good sense on English,which is so helpful throughout language learning.Last but not least,it also benefits a lot if you actively use English in your daily life frequently.Sincerely hoping you can benefit from the above and will be a successful high-school English learner.Best wishes!Yours,Bruce请按照满分25分打分,
分数少了可以再加
我曾经参加过安徽省高考阅卷工作,在高考阅卷中采用global scoring原则,简单的说
21-25分 漂漂亮亮
16-20分 有模有样
11-15分 马马虎虎
6-10分 糊里糊涂
1-5分 一塌糊涂
按照这个标准,你的作文分数应该在19-22分之间,我倾向21分
再问： 老师，您好！您能再给我评下另一篇作文分数吗？作文在这里：http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/273000141.html 还有，我这篇作文有哪些不足呢？谢谢了！
再答： However, most of the poor learners are those who have been performing badly on English from the junior school. 这里应该用in而不是on Therefore, just believe in yourself, cast away your fears and build up the confidence to learn English well. 英语是结构语言，这句最好用连词合并成符合句。 I suggest you make full use of your time to review what you have learned in the junior school before staring your further education. 其实可以替换make full use of 的词组很多，take advantage of 就略显高级。 应该是starting 和study In addition, by reciting some articles in textbooks, you can develop a good sense on English, which is so helpful throughout language learning. a good sense of English. 这一句把by状语放在English 后面，句意更明确。 Last but not least, it also benefits a lot if you actively use English in your daily life frequently. 这句主语应该是you 而不是it Sincerely hoping you can benefit from the above and will be a successful high-school English learner. Best wishes! Yours, Bruce
再问： 太感谢您了。 原来我的作文这么多问题。。。急死了！ 要是您那样的老师教我就好了。我是农村中学的，我们老师全都看不出来啊，就几天就高考了，唉，怎么办？英语我想保140的，老师在作文这方面有什么好的建议吗？
再答： 其实从你的英语作文来看，你的英语基本功是非常扎实的。如果稍微注意一下，在文章中能够体现较多的语法现象更好。如倒装，虚拟，从句，非谓语等。词汇上要用后来学的，尽可能用词组代替单词用，如上文中 is helpful 可以用 is of great help 代替。
再问： 感谢老师的指点！ 我写复杂句子是比较擅长的，有时我是觉得故意、过分追求高级会使行文不太流畅，所以我现在看到作文题马上就滔滔不绝完全凭潜意识写，只求流畅。另外我每次看答案感觉许多没我好，也没有很多高级的地方，就没注意这方面。老师的意思是说在语法、词汇高级方面可以注意一下，刻意增加点高级的地方。好的，我试试。后天放假，利用假期几天我试着改变下“写作风格”，写几篇看看效果。到时再请老师批阅，可不可以？
再答： 好的
21-25分 漂漂亮亮
16-20分 有模有样
11-15分 马马虎虎
6-10分 糊里糊涂
1-5分 一塌糊涂
按照这个标准,你的作文分数应该在19-22分之间,我倾向21分
再问： 老师，您好！您能再给我评下另一篇作文分数吗？作文在这里：http://zhidao.baidu.com/question/273000141.html 还有，我这篇作文有哪些不足呢？谢谢了！
再答： However, most of the poor learners are those who have been performing badly on English from the junior school. 这里应该用in而不是on Therefore, just believe in yourself, cast away your fears and build up the confidence to learn English well. 英语是结构语言，这句最好用连词合并成符合句。 I suggest you make full use of your time to review what you have learned in the junior school before staring your further education. 其实可以替换make full use of 的词组很多，take advantage of 就略显高级。 应该是starting 和study In addition, by reciting some articles in textbooks, you can develop a good sense on English, which is so helpful throughout language learning. a good sense of English. 这一句把by状语放在English 后面，句意更明确。 Last but not least, it also benefits a lot if you actively use English in your daily life frequently. 这句主语应该是you 而不是it Sincerely hoping you can benefit from the above and will be a successful high-school English learner. Best wishes! Yours, Bruce
再问： 太感谢您了。 原来我的作文这么多问题。。。急死了！ 要是您那样的老师教我就好了。我是农村中学的，我们老师全都看不出来啊，就几天就高考了，唉，怎么办？英语我想保140的，老师在作文这方面有什么好的建议吗？
再答： 其实从你的英语作文来看，你的英语基本功是非常扎实的。如果稍微注意一下，在文章中能够体现较多的语法现象更好。如倒装，虚拟，从句，非谓语等。词汇上要用后来学的，尽可能用词组代替单词用，如上文中 is helpful 可以用 is of great help 代替。
再问： 感谢老师的指点！ 我写复杂句子是比较擅长的，有时我是觉得故意、过分追求高级会使行文不太流畅，所以我现在看到作文题马上就滔滔不绝完全凭潜意识写，只求流畅。另外我每次看答案感觉许多没我好，也没有很多高级的地方，就没注意这方面。老师的意思是说在语法、词汇高级方面可以注意一下，刻意增加点高级的地方。好的，我试试。后天放假，利用假期几天我试着改变下“写作风格”，写几篇看看效果。到时再请老师批阅，可不可以？
再答： 好的