作业帮帮我改正下英语一级作文!谢谢!
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帮我改正下英语一级作文!谢谢!
情景：昨天是小红16岁的生日,她开了个晚会,邀请我们大家参加.请用英语写一篇50字的作文,描述小红的生日晚会.内容具体如下：
1.小红在昨晚8点开了个16岁的生日晚会.
2.她的同学和朋友都参加了生日晚会
3.她父母为大家准备了丰盛的饭菜,我们给她送了礼物
4.她很愉快,我们也很开心.
我写的如下：
xiaohong is sixteen years old ,yesterday was her brithday, he had big party,start in 8'o clock she intived classmate and good friends .she parents is prapare delicious food for us .We have present a gift to her .
She was very happy, we were happy too!
情景：昨天是小红16岁的生日,她开了个晚会,邀请我们大家参加.请用英语写一篇50字的作文,描述小红的生日晚会.内容具体如下：
1.小红在昨晚8点开了个16岁的生日晚会.
2.她的同学和朋友都参加了生日晚会
3.她父母为大家准备了丰盛的饭菜,我们给她送了礼物
4.她很愉快,我们也很开心.
我写的如下：
xiaohong is sixteen years old ,yesterday was her brithday, he had big party,start in 8'o clock she intived classmate and good friends .she parents is prapare delicious food for us .We have present a gift to her .
She was very happy, we were happy too!
我个人觉得：
xiaohong is sixteen years old ,yesterday was her brithday,-----------这句这样：Yesterday was Xiaohong's sixteenth（sixteenth这个单词可以写成16th） birthday.And now she is sixteen years old.(后面这句其实可以不要,但为了字数也可以要.）
he had big party,start in 8'o clock -----------是she不是he,小红一般是女生.我觉得改成这样：She held a big birthday party at 8 pm.举办聚会：hold a party ,因为是昨天,所以hold 改为held.
she intived classmate and good friends .---------------是invited不是intived.改为：She invited classmates and good friends to join the party.
she parents is prapare delicious food for us --------------是her parents 不是she parents.是prepare不是prapare.改为：Her parents prepared delicious food for us.
We have present a gift to her .--------------改为：And we also gave some gifts to Xiaohong.
She was very happy,we were happy too!-------------一般这样的两句之间表并列要加and,改为：She was very happy,and we were happy too!
以上个人觉得,
xiaohong is sixteen years old ,yesterday was her brithday,-----------这句这样：Yesterday was Xiaohong's sixteenth（sixteenth这个单词可以写成16th） birthday.And now she is sixteen years old.(后面这句其实可以不要,但为了字数也可以要.）
he had big party,start in 8'o clock -----------是she不是he,小红一般是女生.我觉得改成这样：She held a big birthday party at 8 pm.举办聚会：hold a party ,因为是昨天,所以hold 改为held.
she intived classmate and good friends .---------------是invited不是intived.改为：She invited classmates and good friends to join the party.
she parents is prapare delicious food for us --------------是her parents 不是she parents.是prepare不是prapare.改为：Her parents prepared delicious food for us.
We have present a gift to her .--------------改为：And we also gave some gifts to Xiaohong.
She was very happy,we were happy too!-------------一般这样的两句之间表并列要加and,改为：She was very happy,and we were happy too!
以上个人觉得,