我的英语作文,虽然很不好,有的句子还是不会写 希望有人能给修改

我的英语作文,虽然很不好,有的句子还是不会写 希望有人能给修改
假日经济的益处
假日经济带来的问题
你的看法
Holiday economy
Nowadays,more and more people like to travel on holiday,and holiday economy are gradually are becoming an improtant part in people's darily spend.The obvirous advantage of holiday economy is doubtlessly its motivation,becasue such holiday economy can motivate people to plunge into funding new things which can absorb many people,What's more taking a holiday can make people feel more relax and happiness than people who never spend their time and money on holiday.
However ,holiday economy also has some side efficts,For one thing,there are not have a perfect system to keep people's safety.For the other,with an increasing number of holiday economy too many pollutions be casued.
In my opinion,hiliday economy have more benifitical the harmful,if the government will make a serious system to ruduce worried that people feel on a travel and people can abide the lays and to their best to protect the environment in the future,the holiday economy may be developed qulickly

这样的提问者我喜欢,不是求答案,而是求进步 我小修改一下吧,简单看看吧,
（）代表删去,大写的单词代表修改错误,【】代表添加的.
Nowadays,more and more people like to travel on holiday,and holiday economy are gradually （are） becoming an IMPORTANT part OF people's DAILY spend.【There is no doubt that/No doubt that】 AN OBVIOUS advantage of holiday economy is （doubtlessly没这个词） its motivation,becasue such holiday economy can motivate people to （plunge into funding new things which can absorb many people这句话是一个语法没有问题、但是表达问题很大的句子.你是要表达什么?请补充说明一下,我不太理解.）(,改为)【.】What's more【,】 taking AN holiday can make people feel more relax and HAPPY than （people）THOSE who never spend their time and money on holiday.
However ,holiday economy also has some side efficts,For one thing,NO SYSTEM CAN BE A perfect ONE to keep people's safety.For the other,with an increasing number of holiday economy[,] too MUCH pollution（s） IS casued.
In my opinion,HOLIDAY economy have more BENEFITS COMPARED TO/THAN HARMS.IF the government will BRING OUT a serious system ONE DAY to COMFORT THOSE worried (that) people (feel on a travel) ON THE ROAD/ON THEIR TRAVELLING,AS WELL AS people can abide the RULES （and）to their best to protect the environment in the future,the holiday economy may be developed quickly.
感觉你学过不少英语知识,但是并不太清楚.拼写错误比较多,希望是打字是的手误.
第一段第二句第一分句,第二段第二句,我建议整句重新写,因为不能理解你想表达什么.
建议：先不求用不熟悉的“大词”,把学过的小词小句用好用对是第一,类似意义的换着用而不总是一个词用到底,也能出彩的：）
知识你已经有了,这样基础就有了,再详细的回顾一下吧,比如一些搭配和句式结构,你的老师你的学校一定有总结.加油!
--gelumi~XD 大笑的gelumi喜欢自己努力的朋友