作业帮请大师批改一下我的一篇英语作文
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请大师批改一下我的一篇英语作文
这是一篇关于吸烟的害处的作文,属于高中的基础写作,由于段考听说考这篇作文,所以小试牛刀,如果有错和不对的地方,请大师们指导指导,
The harmful of smoking
With getting into the habit of smoking,whenever we feel like stopping smoking that we are finging it difficult to give it up.It is no doubt that smoking on we did a lot of influence.For example,do terrible damger to your health and lungs.Beside,smoking is harmful and it is not only bad for smokers themselves,but also bad for non-smokers.
In my opinion,although no smoking is not fair for smokers,we could break away from become a smokers
如果是15分的作文,能给多少分,请大师帮我提高一个层次,五句话句子作文
这是一篇关于吸烟的害处的作文,属于高中的基础写作,由于段考听说考这篇作文,所以小试牛刀,如果有错和不对的地方,请大师们指导指导,
The harmful of smoking
With getting into the habit of smoking,whenever we feel like stopping smoking that we are finging it difficult to give it up.It is no doubt that smoking on we did a lot of influence.For example,do terrible damger to your health and lungs.Beside,smoking is harmful and it is not only bad for smokers themselves,but also bad for non-smokers.
In my opinion,although no smoking is not fair for smokers,we could break away from become a smokers
如果是15分的作文,能给多少分,请大师帮我提高一个层次,五句话句子作文
我英语也不咂滴.看了下你的作文,根据你的意思我做了些更改,基本保留了你的原句：
The harm of smoking.
With getting in the habit of smoking,whenever smokers feel like to stop smoking that they find it is difficult to give it up.
It(There) is no doubt that smoking influences people's (health) a lot.
For example,firstly(on one hand) smoking has terrible damage to smoker's lung.
secondly(on the other hand),it also harms non-smokers around.
(最后一段我不做更改,但是会在后面附上一段总结.因为这种说明性文章一般不建议阐述个人主观意见,最好是给予客观评价即可）.
In conclusion,smoking is bad(harmful) for people's health.It is not good to get in the habit of smoking.
记得有人说过这样的话,高中生英语作文想写好,首先从简单句和自己最熟悉的句子开始写,用最平实的语言去阐明你想要表达的意思.
切忌写很多语法结构复杂,单词自己都不熟悉的句子.那些东西华而不实,在考试中不易拿到好分数.当然英语基础好了,可以再去尝试更难更复杂的句子.
差点忘了,如果15分的作文,应该是8-9分左右.
The harm of smoking.
With getting in the habit of smoking,whenever smokers feel like to stop smoking that they find it is difficult to give it up.
It(There) is no doubt that smoking influences people's (health) a lot.
For example,firstly(on one hand) smoking has terrible damage to smoker's lung.
secondly(on the other hand),it also harms non-smokers around.
(最后一段我不做更改,但是会在后面附上一段总结.因为这种说明性文章一般不建议阐述个人主观意见,最好是给予客观评价即可）.
In conclusion,smoking is bad(harmful) for people's health.It is not good to get in the habit of smoking.
记得有人说过这样的话,高中生英语作文想写好,首先从简单句和自己最熟悉的句子开始写,用最平实的语言去阐明你想要表达的意思.
切忌写很多语法结构复杂,单词自己都不熟悉的句子.那些东西华而不实,在考试中不易拿到好分数.当然英语基础好了,可以再去尝试更难更复杂的句子.
差点忘了,如果15分的作文,应该是8-9分左右.