英语翻译下面4段英语第一句为原句,哪个高手能帮我标出除原句以外的几句每一句做个标注,根据原句做比对,哪些已经语法错误,哪

英语翻译
下面4段英语第一句为原句,哪个高手能帮我标出除原句以外的几句每一句做个标注,根据原句做比对,哪些已经语法错误,哪些和原句意思想近.
Free Laptop Can Be Accessed on the Web 原句
Free laptop are accessible on the Web
Free laptop on the network can access
Free laptop Web access
Free Laptop is available on the Web
Free laptop is available on the Web
Practical Way To Obtain Online Marriage Records 原句
Practical method for obtaining marriage records online
Practical way to get marriage records online
Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Records
Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Music
Convenient way to get marriage records online
Get Specific About What You DO For Clients:The Results!原句
Result:You get concrete about what to do for clients?
Information on what you do for clients concrete results!
Accordion Shutters Can Protect Your Home 原句
Accordion shutters can protect your family
Accordion Shutters Can Protect Home
Accordion Shutters can protect your home
还有全部翻译出来！
原句也要！病句，语法错误也无所谓翻译成中文就行！

Free laptop are accessible to the Web.
如果用accessible,不可以用on,要用to.
Free laptop on the network can access…
如果这样写的话,access后面要加东西,不然句子不完整.
Free laptop Web access…
这个句子也是不完整.
Free Laptop is available on the Web
这边不适合用available.
Practical method to obtain marriage records through online
obtaining前面要加“is,are”.
例如：She is obtaining her certificate soon.
Practical way to get marriage records through online
如果直接用marriage records online的话就是网上结婚记录.所以应加through.
Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Records
Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Music (X)
music是音乐,不是记录哦!
Convenient way to get marriage records online
convenient是方便,在这边好像与原句意思不符.用functional way比较好.
Get concrete about what to do for clients?The Results.
额,前面Result不可以这样用.
Information on what you do for clients concrete results!
Take note on what you do for clients' concrete results!
Accordion shutters can protect your family
这边要讲家园吧?用家庭好像不适合.
Accordion Shutters Can Protect Home
这边your不可以删掉,不然就语法不对.
Accordion Shutters can protect your home（有什么不一样?）
再问： 能帮我把每句用中文翻译出来不？ 病就就是病句，不完整也罢，我就想看下和原句差多少。 谢谢了。。。
再答： 那我就直接翻译看看 Free laptop are accessible on the Web 免费的手提电脑可以访问在网络。 Free laptop on the network can access 免费手提电脑在网络可以访问 Free laptop Web access 免费手提电脑的网络访问 Free Laptop is available on the Web 免费手提电脑可用在网上 Practical Way To Obtain Online Marriage Records 原句 Practical method for obtaining marriage records online 实际的方法要上网拿结婚记录 Practical way to get marriage records online 实际的管道到网上拿结婚记录 Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Records 实际的管道去拿网上结婚记录 Practical Way to Get Online Marriage Music 实际的管道去拿网上结婚音乐 Convenient way to get marriage records online 方便的管道到网上去拿结婚记录 Result: You get concrete about what to do for clients? 结果：你得到什么具体有关你可以为客户做什么？ Information on what you do for clients concrete results! 信息在你可以为客户做什么去得到具体的成绩。 Accordion shutters can protect your family 手风琴窗户可以保护你的家人。 Accordion Shutters Can Protect Home 手风琴窗户可以保护家。 Accordion Shutters can protect your home
再问： 原句也帮翻译下吧...
再答： Free Laptop Can Be Accessed on the Web 免费手提电脑可以访问网网络。 Practical Way To Obtain Online Marriage Records 实际的管道去获取网络结婚记录。 Get Specific About What You DO For Clients: The Results! 你可以为客户做什么明确的事：结果。 Accordion Shutters can protect your home 手风琴窗户可以保护你的家