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For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay in honor of teachers on the occasion of Teacher's Day.You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
1向老师表达节日祝贺
2从一件小事来回忆老师的教诲和无私的奉献
3我如何回报老师的关爱
Teacher's Day
As is known to us all,today is the Teacher's day.Having attended our university for two years,I really want to say "Thank you!" and "Best wishes!" to all of my professors,for they have been working hard and exerting all their strength to help us to make progress in our major,to enlarge our mind,to open up our eyes,and so forth.
In these two years,there are some little cases which reflect teacher's convection and contribution to us.Topping the list,it was my french teacher,Madame Guo,that take extra trouble over my french when I had just had a surgery.On account of the surgery,I had to lie down on the bed and just read something.After her classes,she called on me and give extra lessons to me.At that time,my heart was filled with gratitude.What a kind-hearted prefessor!During that semester,she had given me 10 extra lesson.In return,I tried my utmost to improve my french competence.I become more and more boung up in french.
As a sophomore who takes up french,I am looking forward to making some plans or somewhat promises in order to appreciate my professor,one of which is that I am going to make more efforts to study french.Additionally,I will help her with some of her daily work,considering that I have some experiences about working in the Student Union and in the Youth League General Branch.
最近有人想整我,我不会骂你,因为我不会上当,我可不想被检举禁号.只是1楼这位同学明显不是在改作文,而是在故意找事,把对的说成错的.请不要来百度上拿你不专业的言论来丢人现眼,
For this part,you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay in honor of teachers on the occasion of Teacher's Day.You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
1向老师表达节日祝贺
2从一件小事来回忆老师的教诲和无私的奉献
3我如何回报老师的关爱
Teacher's Day
As is known to us all,today is the Teacher's day.Having attended our university for two years,I really want to say "Thank you!" and "Best wishes!" to all of my professors,for they have been working hard and exerting all their strength to help us to make progress in our major,to enlarge our mind,to open up our eyes,and so forth.
In these two years,there are some little cases which reflect teacher's convection and contribution to us.Topping the list,it was my french teacher,Madame Guo,that take extra trouble over my french when I had just had a surgery.On account of the surgery,I had to lie down on the bed and just read something.After her classes,she called on me and give extra lessons to me.At that time,my heart was filled with gratitude.What a kind-hearted prefessor!During that semester,she had given me 10 extra lesson.In return,I tried my utmost to improve my french competence.I become more and more boung up in french.
As a sophomore who takes up french,I am looking forward to making some plans or somewhat promises in order to appreciate my professor,one of which is that I am going to make more efforts to study french.Additionally,I will help her with some of her daily work,considering that I have some experiences about working in the Student Union and in the Youth League General Branch.
最近有人想整我,我不会骂你,因为我不会上当,我可不想被检举禁号.只是1楼这位同学明显不是在改作文,而是在故意找事,把对的说成错的.请不要来百度上拿你不专业的言论来丢人现眼,
你好,根据你的文章,我做了如下修改.
As it is known to all that today is Teachers' Day.（注意as是连词,前后句应该成句,另外运用从句会加分）Having been in my university for two years,（attend表示出席会议、课堂什么的 ,来大学两年这样表达就行）I really want to say "Thank you"and "Best wishes"to all my teachers,for they have been working so hard and exerting all their strength to help us,broaden our horizen（开阔眼界这样表达）,enlarge our mind.With their help,it is fortunate for us to make great progresses （注意单复数）in our major.
During these two years ,there are some cases expressing their selfless devotion to duty as teachers.（大学老师用teacher就行,professor是教授）Madame Guo,my French teacher,stands in the first place in my heart（在我心目中第一位）.She spends her free time teaching me French after I have operation.During that time,I had to lie down on bed and only did some readings,and it's amazing that Guo came to hosiptal for 10 times in person to make up what I had missed for courses.I was deeply moved by such a kind-hearted person.Due to her persistent contribution,my French improves a lot and I become more and more confidence in French.
As a sophomore who major in French,I'm looking forward to repaying my teacher's contribution to me,and I think the best way is make more efforts to study French.Additionally, working in the Student Union and in the Youth League General Branch help me gain experience about working,so I would like to assitant my teacher's work to alleviate her stress.
首先,写文章要注意逻辑,必要的语法要掌握,避免结构累赘.
give a lesson to sb表示给某人一个教训、上了一课;心存感激不能是my heart was filled with gratitude,英文中只能是人很感激,主语必须是人,你可以这样表达express one's heartfelt gratitude 表示衷心的感激；take up表示占据、开始从事,专业是法语可以这样表达,I major in French;appreciate,通常是I appreciate your help ,欣赏多用于文学方面,强调对事物有深入的理解能力.表达谢意用express one's gratitude 最好.
这篇文章总体来说真不太算好,实话实说,但是,只要你注意我所说的,注重细节,反复多多去练习,最后把历年真题都做一遍,因为熟能生巧嘛,我相信你四六级作文还是可以很优秀的.
望满意~~~~~~~~~~
As it is known to all that today is Teachers' Day.（注意as是连词,前后句应该成句,另外运用从句会加分）Having been in my university for two years,（attend表示出席会议、课堂什么的 ,来大学两年这样表达就行）I really want to say "Thank you"and "Best wishes"to all my teachers,for they have been working so hard and exerting all their strength to help us,broaden our horizen（开阔眼界这样表达）,enlarge our mind.With their help,it is fortunate for us to make great progresses （注意单复数）in our major.
During these two years ,there are some cases expressing their selfless devotion to duty as teachers.（大学老师用teacher就行,professor是教授）Madame Guo,my French teacher,stands in the first place in my heart（在我心目中第一位）.She spends her free time teaching me French after I have operation.During that time,I had to lie down on bed and only did some readings,and it's amazing that Guo came to hosiptal for 10 times in person to make up what I had missed for courses.I was deeply moved by such a kind-hearted person.Due to her persistent contribution,my French improves a lot and I become more and more confidence in French.
As a sophomore who major in French,I'm looking forward to repaying my teacher's contribution to me,and I think the best way is make more efforts to study French.Additionally, working in the Student Union and in the Youth League General Branch help me gain experience about working,so I would like to assitant my teacher's work to alleviate her stress.
首先,写文章要注意逻辑,必要的语法要掌握,避免结构累赘.
give a lesson to sb表示给某人一个教训、上了一课;心存感激不能是my heart was filled with gratitude,英文中只能是人很感激,主语必须是人,你可以这样表达express one's heartfelt gratitude 表示衷心的感激；take up表示占据、开始从事,专业是法语可以这样表达,I major in French;appreciate,通常是I appreciate your help ,欣赏多用于文学方面,强调对事物有深入的理解能力.表达谢意用express one's gratitude 最好.
这篇文章总体来说真不太算好,实话实说,但是,只要你注意我所说的,注重细节,反复多多去练习,最后把历年真题都做一遍,因为熟能生巧嘛,我相信你四六级作文还是可以很优秀的.
望满意~~~~~~~~~~