这是我写的一篇英文文章,写的不怎么地,希望别笑话,还有希望哪位大哥能帮我修改修改,我在此先谢过了.

这是我写的一篇英文文章,写的不怎么地,希望别笑话,还有希望哪位大哥能帮我修改修改,我在此先谢过了.
How thought-provoking the picture above looks in the new millennium.AS is vividly depicted in the cartoon,there is a delicious and beneficial meal。After getting a more clear perspective of it,we can see the caption which reads the delicious and benefited meal.
The picture simply designed does n’t only mean the superficial meaning it expresses ,but also is more profound.In fact,the purpose of the author is to us that the traditional virtue of multi-cultures should be appreciated。Nowadays,many people only study a kind of culture，which is far beyond what is scientifically justified on the grounds that they ignore the importance of various cultures。In other words,as the tendency towards globalization becomes irresistible,just as Bill Clinton put it”Globalization is not something we can hold on or turn off.It seems to be a force of nature—like wind or water.Multi-cultures plays a pivotal role in building our harmonious community.

my responses mainly on flow of ideas
the first time since joining baidu four months ago
as most focuses having been directed to common mistakes
obviously
the purpose of this writing has been achieved handsomely
with the topic idea 'thought-provoking' to the conclusion 'Multi-cultures ...community' clearly presented within 200 words
however
as an average reader
i would like to have it a little bit more reader friendly
which usually means just a few more factual details for easy understanding
to this end i would prefer here a brief description of the picture
say
...there is a delicious and beneficial meal,a mix of chop suey,a burger and a piece of tuna suishi.
thus giving the term 'beneficial' the meaning beyond vitamins and proteins
one an average reader can associate with 'multi-cultures'
also
if i were the writer
i would use
(1) the caption,which reads:the delicious ...
(2) The picture ,simply designed,not only means the superficial meaning it expresses...
(3) In fact,the message of the author is to us that the traditional virtues of multi-cultures should be appreciated.
(4) study one kind of culture
(5) what is socially justified...
(6) close quotation marks in :as Bill Clinton put it”Globalization is not something...
there are two other points i would like to make
(1) i have difficulty in understanding
...which is far beyond what is scientifically justified...
(2) it seems to me that the sentence 'In other words,as the...' is incomplete
this writing is one of the best
if not the best
i have read on this platform
honestly
i enjoyed reading it very much
and honestly
i am unable to write one like this myself