请帮我改一篇作文,六级要求,will thei nternet replace university?

请帮我改一篇作文,六级要求,will thei nternet replace university?
with the rapid development of science and technology,internet has became a very popular access to get knowledge.however,it also make an enormous impact on traditional education.many people begin to choose online study to get diploma rather than university,but will internet really replace university?
attitude towards the arguement vary from people to people.from my point of view,university is still in the dominant position ,internet may just be a helpful assess to study.first,in the university,our teeaher could give us a higher quality education which internet fail to do.when we have troubles in study,we can directly ask our teacher ,they could explain the problom clearly,nevertheless,i do not think the internet could be capable tocomplete the work as excellent as our teacher .besides,university is not only a place for syudy,it also offer us an opportunity to cmmunicate with each other ,only in the university can we improve our ability to adapt the complex society.
taken all those factors into consideration,we can naturally come to the conclusion that,it
is almost impossible for internet to replace university,but internet is still a tool of significance for learning.

1注意大写和单复数
2英文的标点符号是实心的句号
3文章单句很多,适当用从句来加长句子.一些句子加点修饰,有些句子是中文式的翻译
4acess等单词重复使用,应选用其他的词代替,measure,way,tool等
but也是重复使用
请问你是用的模板吗?你有上新东方吗
再问： 没有用模板，没上新东方，就是学校老师讲的，怎么写开头结尾之类的，然后自己写的
再答： 哦，你用的一些连词，和我们老师给的一样，这些用的很好