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英语作文修改 这是一篇回信 我写的 老师说有很多错误 求高手一一修改 和说明原因谢谢了!Dear Lucy,What y

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英语作文修改
这是一篇回信 我写的 老师说有很多错误 求高手一一修改 和说明原因谢谢了!
Dear Lucy,
What you said is common with some middle school students.Here is my advice.
Don't be shy.You should become outgoing.At first,you must talk with other,make a lot of friends.Sometimes,you can get some help from your classmates and friends ,because they are have the same age as you.It's easy to understand each other.On the other hand,you can get some help from your teachers and parents,because they are full of loving and kind .They're have lots of good experience .Take it easy.It's not hard to do it .
Hope you can get out of your trouble soon.
Yours,
Peter
那个有句改成 because they are full of love
以下只是个人认为的、只针对语法,不一定全对,仅供参考.建议文中少用must,这个语气太过强硬,有命令语气,不太好.还有,有些句子觉得表述地不太好吧.那个,请问你几年级?
Dear Lucy,
What you said is common among(在……之间) some middle school students. Here are(下面的建议不止一个) my advices(前面改成are了).
Don't be shy. You should become outgoing. At first, you must talk with others(这里的其他人泛指), make a lot of friends. Sometimes, you can get some help from your classmates and friends , because they are at(短语:sb. be at the same age) the same age as you. It's easy for each other(这样合理) to understand . On the other hand(不建议使用,因为前面没有on the one hand,这里出现有些突兀),you can get some help from your teachers and parents, because they are full of loving and kind . They(有have这个动词即可) have lots of good experience . Take it easy. It's not hard to do it .
Hope you can get out of your trouble soon.
Yours,
Pete