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修改英语作文Dear mom,How nice to write to you again,mom!Today,I`m

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Dear mom,
How nice to write to you again,mom!Today,I`m writing to recall the old days we shared together.
Do you still remember the troubles I put you to in my early 13?It was the first time that I had left home to attend 7-day-long school army discipline.At beginning,I was too shy to talk to anyone and had no knowledge of how to look after myself.When I felt helpless and didn`t know to ask whom for help,it was you who came up and help me out.You taught me to wash the clothes and encouraged me to join them,which effectively changed the awful situation.
Mom,it`s hard for me to pay off the debt I owe you.Thanks for the selfless devotion and the great pains you take to bring me up.
Yours sincerely
Li Hua
不流畅 语法错误 不地道,中国式英语 等等,反正是不好的都挑出来吧。急 作文得16分,顺便给些指导意见最好。
大哥我本来是想给你改的.但是你这句子真的是.写的让我无从下手.
再问: 写的很乱 对不住了
再答: 写作文的时候不要先想中文再翻译,一开始就用英语打草稿。。你写的句子很中国化。。 还有啊,多背点好的句子,像新概念啊好的开头结尾啊范文啊都可以。。 而且你用词不太准确,有些词虽然中文意思一样,但是用的语境有很大差别。。 我看一楼给你改的也。。好像是有点受你的影响了。。如果你需要的话我写篇好一点的给你吧。。看你有什么需要了。。。。