作业帮英语：请老师点评一下我这篇初三的作文
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英语：请老师点评一下我这篇初三的作文
作为中学生,我们应该怎样节约能源呢?请写一篇征文
提示：1.步行、骑自行车
2.节约用电,随手关掉水龙头,节约用纸
3.回收废品
The advice of save energy
Now,you can see that wasting energy everywhere.It makes much pullotion and the Earth has been more and more illing.So,there are some advice that is made by myself to save energy.
To start with,drive car can make much CO2 that makes Earth be hotter and hotter.I think you can walk or ride bikes instead driving car.
Then,power,water and paper also be energy.So,you should save it by saving power,drop by closing water tap and wseing less paper.
At last,rubbish can be recycled to be used second especially third times!It also a good advice that I think.
往狠里批,除了非常出彩的句子都不要表扬,忠言逆耳,我想要的是提高,在此谢过各位为我点评的老师们.
作为中学生,我们应该怎样节约能源呢?请写一篇征文
提示：1.步行、骑自行车
2.节约用电,随手关掉水龙头,节约用纸
3.回收废品
The advice of save energy
Now,you can see that wasting energy everywhere.It makes much pullotion and the Earth has been more and more illing.So,there are some advice that is made by myself to save energy.
To start with,drive car can make much CO2 that makes Earth be hotter and hotter.I think you can walk or ride bikes instead driving car.
Then,power,water and paper also be energy.So,you should save it by saving power,drop by closing water tap and wseing less paper.
At last,rubbish can be recycled to be used second especially third times!It also a good advice that I think.
往狠里批,除了非常出彩的句子都不要表扬,忠言逆耳,我想要的是提高,在此谢过各位为我点评的老师们.
The advice of save energy ( Advices or Suggestions on energy saving )
Now,you can see that wasting energy everywhere.It makes much( so much) pullotion(pollution) and the Earth ( is getting very ill by the minute)has been more and more illing. So there (here )are some advices that are made by myself to save energy.
To start with, drive car ( driving a car )can make(produce so ) much CO2 that makes the Earth becomes hotter and hotter. Thus I think you can walk or ride bikes instead driving a car.
Then power,water and paper are also (valuable ) be energy(energies). So you should save it by saving power, save every drop by closing water tap and wasting less papers.
At last , some rubbish can be recycled to be used again a second time , might be a third time too ! this is also a good advice that I think.
Now,you can see that wasting energy everywhere.It makes much( so much) pullotion(pollution) and the Earth ( is getting very ill by the minute)has been more and more illing. So there (here )are some advices that are made by myself to save energy.
To start with, drive car ( driving a car )can make(produce so ) much CO2 that makes the Earth becomes hotter and hotter. Thus I think you can walk or ride bikes instead driving a car.
Then power,water and paper are also (valuable ) be energy(energies). So you should save it by saving power, save every drop by closing water tap and wasting less papers.
At last , some rubbish can be recycled to be used again a second time , might be a third time too ! this is also a good advice that I think.