作业帮看一下这篇文章有什么毛病,如果满分10分的话,这篇文章能打几分【英语】
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看一下这篇文章有什么毛病,如果满分10分的话,这篇文章能打几分【英语】
Taiyuan is the capital of Shanxi.Taiyuan is a big and beautiful city.There are more than 4.2millon people lived there.It`s south-east of Beijing.The tourists enjoys eating noodles and dumpling.The Jinci Park,double-tower temple are beautiful famous places.Taiyuan is a beautiful city.Hope you have a good time in there.
Taiyuan is the capital of Shanxi.Taiyuan is a big and beautiful city.There are more than 4.2millon people lived there.It`s south-east of Beijing.The tourists enjoys eating noodles and dumpling.The Jinci Park,double-tower temple are beautiful famous places.Taiyuan is a beautiful city.Hope you have a good time in there.
标点符号用的有点问题,语句不太连贯,时态有点小问题.
满分要看是什么标准了.我给你修改一下应该能拿高分.
TaiYuan is the capital of Shanxi Province (这里加'省'让读者更明白这不是一个国家）, it is a big and beautiful city.(并为一句更连贯) There are more than 4.2 million people living here(时态).TaiYuan is located on the South-East side of BeiJing(更顺畅). Tourists enjoy(时态) eating the famous dumplings and noodles(时态+连贯). The JinCi park, a double-tower temple is a very beautiful and well-know tourism site. (舒畅) Any tourist should enjoy a stay. (你这里突然用第一人称感觉很别扭,帮你改了一下,第三人称)
满分要看是什么标准了.我给你修改一下应该能拿高分.
TaiYuan is the capital of Shanxi Province (这里加'省'让读者更明白这不是一个国家）, it is a big and beautiful city.(并为一句更连贯) There are more than 4.2 million people living here(时态).TaiYuan is located on the South-East side of BeiJing(更顺畅). Tourists enjoy(时态) eating the famous dumplings and noodles(时态+连贯). The JinCi park, a double-tower temple is a very beautiful and well-know tourism site. (舒畅) Any tourist should enjoy a stay. (你这里突然用第一人称感觉很别扭,帮你改了一下,第三人称)