作业帮(20140420)高中英语书面表达一篇,
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(20140420)高中英语书面表达一篇,
书面表达
近年来,我国很多地区频繁出现雾霾天气,引发人们对空气污染的密切关注.某机构进行的一项调查显示,造成空气污染的原因主要有以下几种:
受访者比例
原因
78％
汽车尾气排放
70.2％
工业污染严重
59.4％
建筑施工扬尘
54.4％
燃煤排放
37.2％
气候原因
请写一篇英语短文,为同学们介绍你搜集到的信息,号召同学们自觉行动起来抵制空气污染.
词数:120左右.
Recently,many areas in China appeared foggy air condition frequently,which results form high air pollution.This problem has been paid attention to by people who suffer from this terrible condition.
A survey shows that 78 percents of people think that the foggy air condition results form the unclear air produced by car,and 70.2 percents of people hold the opinion that its because of the industry pollution.59.4 percents of the people think its caused by ash while 54.4 percents of people think the reason is coals pollution.37.2 percents of people hold the opinion that it results from the condition.
Air pollution influences our health and regular life styles.From my perspective,we are supposed to try our best to be opposed of the foggy air pollution and protect our earth!
书面表达
近年来,我国很多地区频繁出现雾霾天气,引发人们对空气污染的密切关注.某机构进行的一项调查显示,造成空气污染的原因主要有以下几种:
受访者比例
原因
78％
汽车尾气排放
70.2％
工业污染严重
59.4％
建筑施工扬尘
54.4％
燃煤排放
37.2％
气候原因
请写一篇英语短文,为同学们介绍你搜集到的信息,号召同学们自觉行动起来抵制空气污染.
词数:120左右.
Recently,many areas in China appeared foggy air condition frequently,which results form high air pollution.This problem has been paid attention to by people who suffer from this terrible condition.
A survey shows that 78 percents of people think that the foggy air condition results form the unclear air produced by car,and 70.2 percents of people hold the opinion that its because of the industry pollution.59.4 percents of the people think its caused by ash while 54.4 percents of people think the reason is coals pollution.37.2 percents of people hold the opinion that it results from the condition.
Air pollution influences our health and regular life styles.From my perspective,we are supposed to try our best to be opposed of the foggy air pollution and protect our earth!
Recently, many areas in China appeared foggy air condition frequently【有直译第一句话的嫌疑,很不地道】, which results form【是不是打错了?】 high【严重的用severe比较好】 air pollution. This problem has been paid attention to by people who suffer from this terrible condition.【不地道】
A survey shows that 78 percents of 【the注意定冠词】people think that the foggy air condition results form【拼写错误以及这个表达曾经用过一次啦】 the unclear air produced by car, and 70.2 percents of 【the】people hold the opinion 【不错】 that its because of the industry pollution【industrial pollutation】. 59.4 percents of the people think its caused by ash while 54.4 percents of 【the】people think the reason is coals pollution【不准确啊】. 37.2 percents of 【the】people hold the opinion that it results from the condition.
Air pollution influences our health and regular life styles. From my perspective【用的不错哟】, we are supposed to try our best to be opposed of the foggy air pollution【前面一大串有点累赘了】 and protect our earth!
建议：语法错误不是很多,不过还是可以看出行文不太地道,感觉肚子里有点知识,但是使用还是不够灵活,建议积累一些常用万用词组,不要自己望文生义现编,会露出破绽的~
文章的格式还可以,建议在第二段前面加一句总领整段的话,大意如下：经过我的查找研究,对于雾霾的原因有以下几种看法巴拉巴拉.
比如对于百分之多少,你的文章里都是直接给数字,看多了很生硬.可以考虑,most of the people, a quarter of the people, more than one-third of the people之类的说法,people 也可以说成 interviewees这样.
还有【XXX怎么认为】这种也可以积累很多不同的说法,比如 XXX thinks/considers/argues/
虽然感觉要求过高了,但是加一点过渡更棒哟,比如：when it comes to XXX, he thinks...意思是,到了XXX这里,他认为.
就在日常积累这些用法,写作文时跟积木一样在语法框架内拼起来就好啦,加油!
A survey shows that 78 percents of 【the注意定冠词】people think that the foggy air condition results form【拼写错误以及这个表达曾经用过一次啦】 the unclear air produced by car, and 70.2 percents of 【the】people hold the opinion 【不错】 that its because of the industry pollution【industrial pollutation】. 59.4 percents of the people think its caused by ash while 54.4 percents of 【the】people think the reason is coals pollution【不准确啊】. 37.2 percents of 【the】people hold the opinion that it results from the condition.
Air pollution influences our health and regular life styles. From my perspective【用的不错哟】, we are supposed to try our best to be opposed of the foggy air pollution【前面一大串有点累赘了】 and protect our earth!
建议：语法错误不是很多,不过还是可以看出行文不太地道,感觉肚子里有点知识,但是使用还是不够灵活,建议积累一些常用万用词组,不要自己望文生义现编,会露出破绽的~
文章的格式还可以,建议在第二段前面加一句总领整段的话,大意如下：经过我的查找研究,对于雾霾的原因有以下几种看法巴拉巴拉.
比如对于百分之多少,你的文章里都是直接给数字,看多了很生硬.可以考虑,most of the people, a quarter of the people, more than one-third of the people之类的说法,people 也可以说成 interviewees这样.
还有【XXX怎么认为】这种也可以积累很多不同的说法,比如 XXX thinks/considers/argues/
虽然感觉要求过高了,但是加一点过渡更棒哟,比如：when it comes to XXX, he thinks...意思是,到了XXX这里,他认为.
就在日常积累这些用法,写作文时跟积木一样在语法框架内拼起来就好啦,加油!