作业帮写了一个博士英文留学自荐信,水平太差,太中国化 求高手相助,使其像一篇地道的留学自荐信,急用,
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写了一个博士英文留学自荐信,水平太差,太中国化 求高手相助,使其像一篇地道的留学自荐信,急用,
Dear Professor:
I am Robbin Zhong (Zhong yan-qian),male,born in Guizhou.I was enrolled by ilin Medical College in 2004,majoring in Biomedical Engineering.After four years of study,I not only acquired knowledge and skills but also obtained a vigorous way of academic thinking of.However,I also feel strongly lack of knowledge,so in 2008,after graduation I went to University of Shanghai for Science and Technology (USST) to study assiduously as a graduate.Because of the love for the field of biomedical engineering,especially for biomedical electronics,I did not change my major during the graduate but to continue learning in this field.I am about to graduate in March 2011.
While studying courses required at school,I have hosted 3 projects and participated in one.Also,I took part in some social activities in my spare time to be much more able to achieve better and social standards.
Summing up my life in college,for the limitation of knowledge,abilities and conditions at that time,I couldn’t do some specific and in-depth work.While in my life of graduate,based on the solid foundation on electronics,I have the chance to participate in a number of projects on biological tissue conducted by my instructors through which I can use engineering means to truly solve the medical problems so that biomedical engineering system is further improved.And my subject of graduate is gradually shifted from pure electronic applications to that which deals with practical engineering problems.In this way can it displays a real e-science reflect the relative advantage of means of implementation of other projects.
I had also won several scholarships,and took part in National Undergraduate Electronic Design Contest twice ranking the third place provincially.In the second classroom,I have used Vb as a front panel Access as database development of the “office equipment management system”.In addition,I have a lot of hobbies like chess,badminton,for badminton I was awarded in the competition.Although I major in electronics,I have a strong interest in other related fields in which I believe I have the ability to do it well.Long-term training has made me cheerful,humorous,energetic,like to think,good at summarizing and solving problems,willing to communicate with others.Besides,I have sense of responsibility and treat things seriously,being initiative,courageous and having the strong team spirit also makes me good at coordination and I am also quick to adapt myself to the new environment and join in the community.However,I have my weakness of being impetuous.
I am greatly grateful for sparing your precious time reading my letter.I hope you will give me a chance to display myself,and believe me that I will make my great contribution to the company’s development.
Sincerely yours,
Dear Professor:
I am Robbin Zhong (Zhong yan-qian),male,born in Guizhou.I was enrolled by ilin Medical College in 2004,majoring in Biomedical Engineering.After four years of study,I not only acquired knowledge and skills but also obtained a vigorous way of academic thinking of.However,I also feel strongly lack of knowledge,so in 2008,after graduation I went to University of Shanghai for Science and Technology (USST) to study assiduously as a graduate.Because of the love for the field of biomedical engineering,especially for biomedical electronics,I did not change my major during the graduate but to continue learning in this field.I am about to graduate in March 2011.
While studying courses required at school,I have hosted 3 projects and participated in one.Also,I took part in some social activities in my spare time to be much more able to achieve better and social standards.
Summing up my life in college,for the limitation of knowledge,abilities and conditions at that time,I couldn’t do some specific and in-depth work.While in my life of graduate,based on the solid foundation on electronics,I have the chance to participate in a number of projects on biological tissue conducted by my instructors through which I can use engineering means to truly solve the medical problems so that biomedical engineering system is further improved.And my subject of graduate is gradually shifted from pure electronic applications to that which deals with practical engineering problems.In this way can it displays a real e-science reflect the relative advantage of means of implementation of other projects.
I had also won several scholarships,and took part in National Undergraduate Electronic Design Contest twice ranking the third place provincially.In the second classroom,I have used Vb as a front panel Access as database development of the “office equipment management system”.In addition,I have a lot of hobbies like chess,badminton,for badminton I was awarded in the competition.Although I major in electronics,I have a strong interest in other related fields in which I believe I have the ability to do it well.Long-term training has made me cheerful,humorous,energetic,like to think,good at summarizing and solving problems,willing to communicate with others.Besides,I have sense of responsibility and treat things seriously,being initiative,courageous and having the strong team spirit also makes me good at coordination and I am also quick to adapt myself to the new environment and join in the community.However,I have my weakness of being impetuous.
I am greatly grateful for sparing your precious time reading my letter.I hope you will give me a chance to display myself,and believe me that I will make my great contribution to the company’s development.
Sincerely yours,
你的英文水平很不错.作为一封自荐信,完全可以.
建议在细节方面再仔细检查一下,如
标点：在but also之前最好有逗号；
时态：毕业时间在 2011,应该用将来时；
in my life of graduate, based on the solid foundation on electronics, I have the chance to ...
应该用 had
另外,life 的用法也值得商榷,不如用 college life, 或 after graduation 等等.
I had also won several scholarships 时态应该用现在完成时 I have ...
数据库课题名称中的首字母应该大写.
另外,However, I have my weakness of being impetuous. 或许可以再斟酌一下.
例如,可改为：
I know I have some shortcomings such as being impetuous at improper time, and I am trying to correct it.
总之,建议在细节上仔细检查一下.
祝你顺利!
建议在细节方面再仔细检查一下,如
标点：在but also之前最好有逗号；
时态：毕业时间在 2011,应该用将来时；
in my life of graduate, based on the solid foundation on electronics, I have the chance to ...
应该用 had
另外,life 的用法也值得商榷,不如用 college life, 或 after graduation 等等.
I had also won several scholarships 时态应该用现在完成时 I have ...
数据库课题名称中的首字母应该大写.
另外,However, I have my weakness of being impetuous. 或许可以再斟酌一下.
例如,可改为：
I know I have some shortcomings such as being impetuous at improper time, and I am trying to correct it.
总之,建议在细节上仔细检查一下.
祝你顺利!