英语翻译PS：这篇文章是我的Personal Statement 的初稿,部分内容已经翻译好了,中文部分是没翻译的.希望

英语翻译
PS：这篇文章是我的Personal Statement 的初稿,部分内容已经翻译好了,中文部分是没翻译的.希望的是可以改变原来翻译的内容和语句,中文部分的翻译也没有必要一模一样,一定要读起来和已经翻译的部分感觉一样就行.另外语言正式些...关乎到本人的人生命运...
希望能尽快些.
突出的可以格外加分
I try desperately to become an actuary who chases the future uncertainty.
According to the survey,until today,there are only 40 qualified actuaries.In Shanghai,the economy center of China,there is purportedly only 30+ actuaries distributed in 10 life insurance companies,obviously the number is much far from meeting the demand of the insurance development.
Some experts even said that,China’s only got 2 actuaries according to the UK standard,and got 0 to that of the USA.
China,as a country with the most population in the world,it’s Insurance and social welfare business shall flourish following the state development.However,for the data stated before,there is extremely lack of actuary,I think China need more and more actuaries qualified universally.
Influenced by my grandma,an accountant and my father,a math teacher,I love math,especially some kind of complicated figure solution.在学校的数学课程方面,我最喜爱和擅长的是函数,因为当我提前完成高中数学的学习后后,我发现大部分的问题都可以用函数来解决,例如不等式和解析几何.也许过程可能绕了弯路,但谨慎些总会算出一个正确答案.这也是我一直坚持的座右铭：“不要害怕走错路,不要害怕走弯路,只要方向正确,就要自信地尽你所能的走下去,一定会到达你要去的地方.” Admittedly ,Maybe I get not much creativity as a student educated in spoon-feed mode,but challenge and pressure remained harmonic with a brave heart.Yet whereby a common person became an actuary who stick to dig out the answer taking every factor,no matter the difficulty.
课外活动方面,I am a master in the Chess .并且夺得了去年的学校Chess Champion 同时我也是main founders of the Chess Club .每周五都是我们社团活动的时间,而为了吸引更多的人参加进我们的社团,我更是增加了围棋和中国象棋进入社团活动,因此我们的社团获得了学校“年度优秀社团”的称号.同时,我从小就喜欢足球,虽然没有经过专业性的训练,但我当了两年的校足球队的defender .两年的联赛让我深刻了解到团队合作的重要性,尤其是作为后防线球员之间的配合更是起到了胜负的关键.
作为一名还差一个月才成年的人来说,我的社会活动并不缺乏.从初中开始,我就经常去Nursing House 陪孤寡老人聊天,有时也会做一些清洁工作.去年夏天,我参加了大连阳光义工的海滩拾垃圾活动,为了大连这个美丽的海滨城市出了一份力.甚至我还有一段短暂的销售经历.在未来,可能的话我真的期望去当2012伦敦奥运会的志愿者,以满足我因为age limited而不能参加2008 Beijing 奥运会的遗憾.
Actuaries,who coordinate and balance the economy,are compared to the first violin by international society.By coincidence I am a violinist.And I have the confidence and ambition to graduate from your University and accumulate experience to be a qualified actuary in 7-8 years,for the better of insurance and social welfare business in China or USA.

改PS需要时间,先给你改几点,你要有兴趣的话就Hi我吧,我可以试着一点一点给你改.不为别的,只是觉得PS确实对你的申请至关重要.
1.According to a survey from XXX (引用别人的数据要注明出处),there are only 40 qualified actuaries.(exactly 40? Among the world or in China?)
2.In shanghai, one of the financial centers in China, there are merely 30 actuaries distributed in ten life insurance companies (10以下的数字要拼写出来,十以上的用阿拉伯) , which is not enough to meet the increasing demand for actuaries in the insurance industry.
3.第一段饱满一点,突出精算师的重要性,缺失性和你强烈的成为精算师的理想,还有就是讨论范围不要仅仅局限于中国.
4.Largest population
5.中国象棋Chinese Chess 围棋 Go 国际象棋Chess（我也下象棋和围棋哈哈）