作业帮急!四级快到了!求帮忙修改一篇四级英语作文吧!感激不尽!
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急!四级快到了!求帮忙修改一篇四级英语作文吧!感激不尽!
这是我写的一篇四级英语作文,求高人帮我看一下,帮我找出其中写错的地方和表达不够地道或准确的地方,总之就是找出你不满意的地方就行了,然后再把你的写法写在下面给我参考就可以了!四级快到了!急啊,大家帮帮忙吧!感激不尽!
How to Discourage middle school students to buy lottery-tickets ?
Now people in growing number are coming to realize that there is a dramatic increase in the number of students who are crazy about buying lottery-tickets ,they take it for granted and even regard it as a fashionable current ,which has aroused common concern .
I think study is the main mission of middle school students ,buying lottery-tickets is bound to distract their attention from it ,which may leads to bad academic achievements and even pose threats to their further study and career development.Therefore ,It is an urgent thing that we put considerable emphasis on this phenomenon .
So as to settle this problem ,in my point of view ,parents can use various ways to lead their children to a common sense that diligence brings wealth rather than opportunism .Following this method may not guarantee the success in solving this problem ,but the pay-off will be worth the sweat we shed .
另外,我写的那个a fashionable current对否?（我想表达“一种时尚潮流”的意思）
这是我写的一篇四级英语作文,求高人帮我看一下,帮我找出其中写错的地方和表达不够地道或准确的地方,总之就是找出你不满意的地方就行了,然后再把你的写法写在下面给我参考就可以了!四级快到了!急啊,大家帮帮忙吧!感激不尽!
How to Discourage middle school students to buy lottery-tickets ?
Now people in growing number are coming to realize that there is a dramatic increase in the number of students who are crazy about buying lottery-tickets ,they take it for granted and even regard it as a fashionable current ,which has aroused common concern .
I think study is the main mission of middle school students ,buying lottery-tickets is bound to distract their attention from it ,which may leads to bad academic achievements and even pose threats to their further study and career development.Therefore ,It is an urgent thing that we put considerable emphasis on this phenomenon .
So as to settle this problem ,in my point of view ,parents can use various ways to lead their children to a common sense that diligence brings wealth rather than opportunism .Following this method may not guarantee the success in solving this problem ,but the pay-off will be worth the sweat we shed .
另外,我写的那个a fashionable current对否?（我想表达“一种时尚潮流”的意思）
我的意见是这样的：
一种时尚潮流直接就 a fashion就行了
1.第二段最后一句 Therefore,it is urgent for us to attach great importance to this phenomenon.个人认为更好
貌似我没看出什么问题了.不过我看出你在表达某些东西的时候过分追求高级词汇.
一种时尚潮流直接就 a fashion就行了
1.第二段最后一句 Therefore,it is urgent for us to attach great importance to this phenomenon.个人认为更好
貌似我没看出什么问题了.不过我看出你在表达某些东西的时候过分追求高级词汇.