作业帮作文点评4
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敬请老师直言不讳地指出我这篇英语作文的问题所在以及如何进行修改？ 若满分25分的话，这篇习作能得多少分？
解题思路： 了解英文表达方式
解题过程：
你好，改写如下
Dear Rose，
How are you？ I am Henry，a Chinese student from Grade One ，Zhengzhou Foreign Language School. My English teacher，Johnson has told me something about you. I would like to be your friend.
Now let me introduce myself .I am 15. Reading novels is my favourite in spare time. As for sports，people always find me play tennis as well as go swimming. lots of friends are around me，for I am outgoing and easygoing. The other day ，Johnson told us about American school life，in which I am interested .Would you like to tell me about yourself？
Looking forward to your reply. Best wishes.
Yours，
Henry
原文结构合理，叙述有层次，涵盖了要点。打分22.
单一句型过多，可以并句，适当避免相同主语，协调时态。
愿你满意，异议来信。
最终答案：略
解题过程：
你好，改写如下
Dear Rose，
How are you？ I am Henry，a Chinese student from Grade One ，Zhengzhou Foreign Language School. My English teacher，Johnson has told me something about you. I would like to be your friend.
Now let me introduce myself .I am 15. Reading novels is my favourite in spare time. As for sports，people always find me play tennis as well as go swimming. lots of friends are around me，for I am outgoing and easygoing. The other day ，Johnson told us about American school life，in which I am interested .Would you like to tell me about yourself？
Looking forward to your reply. Best wishes.
Yours，
Henry
原文结构合理，叙述有层次，涵盖了要点。打分22.
单一句型过多，可以并句，适当避免相同主语，协调时态。
愿你满意，异议来信。
最终答案：略