高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）

高中英语作文评分2（请高中英语教师进）

这也是即将要高三的一次模拟考,作文自己写好(无修改,一气呵成）但是没人评分,望各位老师评一下分并且写下您的观点和修改建议.谢谢.

 

      Young people are often at a loss when it`s up to them to choose their way of life . As it is shown at the picture , a young man with a bag on his shoulder ,looks at the sign of the road ,knowing nowhere to go . There is no denying that we young men often lose our way of the life ,which will not lead us to success . So how can we do when it is up to us to choose our way of life ? here are some suggestions.

     To start with , It is us who parents expect to be sccussful ,we ought not to make them disappiont , thus it is of much significance to learn to be mature .Secondly , what we also do is learn some social skills which benefit us a lot . Moreover, we may learn something from our parents as well ,it is well known to us that parents are the guidance in our life . Lastly ,we are supposed to do what we want so that we will improve our other skill.

     Obviously, Were we to follow those advice ,we would be able to choose our way of life . Only in this way can we be awake at the important choice

高考英语作文评分标准
1 总分为25分,按5个档次给分.
2 评分时,先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次,然后以该档次的要求来衡量,确定或调整档次,最后给分.
3 词数少于 80和多于 120的,从总分中减去2分.
4 评分时,应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性.
5 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面,评分时,应视其对交际的影响程度予以考虑.英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受.
6 如书写较差,以至影响交际,将分数降低一个档次.
7 内容要点可用不同方式表达,对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分.
先来说你的语法问题,正如图片所示as is shown in the picture,而不是at the picture;看着路标是looking而不是looks,后面的knowing之前应该加个and.首字母大写Here.第二段whose parents而不是who,让某人失望let sb down更地道一些.What we also should do is to learn.第二段第三行it is前面加个because...other skills.这算作一道提建议的作文,第一第二第三最后说法略显老套,要我打分就在及格边缘咯.
再问： 谢谢，1.但是What we should do is to 这个to 不是要省略嘛？
2. 上面一些特殊的句型能加分吗？
3. “第一第二第三最后说法 ”要怎么说才更好？
4 . 满分25分的题目，这篇能拿几分？
再答： to为什么要省略呢？看例句：As a student, what should we do to protect the environment?这个例句当中to不定式表目的，文章中的to learn...是指客观的expection,不可以省略的。特殊句型。。。恕我直言，这在老师眼中并不怎么特殊，记住你直面的是高考英语作文，跟你回答同样一道题的有几百万甚至更多考生。First of all, 首先Firstly, …Secondly, ...Thirdly, … 第一，第二，第三First, …Then, …Finally,… 首先, 其次, 最后In the first place, 首先To begin with, …Next, …Finally,… 首先, 其次, 最后Besides此外Furthermore, 此外In addition, 此外In particular, 特别地Moreover, 此外What is more 另外As has been noted, 如前所述As I have said, 如我所述In brief, 简言之In conclusion, 总之In short, 简言之In summary, 总之To sum up, 总之Eventually, … 最后From this point of view, … 从这个观点来看In my opinion, … 以我看来In summary, … 总而言之On account of this, we can find that… 由此我们可以发现On the whole, … 总起来说要我打分就在15分或者多一点了，不要气馁，注意书写，卷面印象分也很重要。加油！