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About China
China has 9.6 millions square kilometers,the population of 1.3 billions,is the world's most populous country.
China is a very long history of the country.For foreigners,it is a very secret place,If you want to come to China for travel,you will be very rush to go every place because you must be want in a short time to see more places.
China has five thousands history.First Chinese Emperor was a cruel ruler who readily killed or banished those who opposed him or his ideas.He is notorious for burning virtually all the books that remained from previous regimes.He even banned scholarly discussions of the past.
Over the past several thousand years,have taken great changes in China.The original feudal system has disappeared.Now people are free to talk,and not have to worry about such an indelible all the books were burned and the learned be buried.
Tea culture is one of the common traits shared by all the 56 ethnic groups in China.Many Chinese people believe that a day is not perfect without a cup of tea.Either on the warm southern mountain area or on the frozen northern grassland.
China is developing science and technology in these years.It's the night of 25th of September,2008.After Shenzhou VII took off successfully,an astronaut would go out of cabin to follow out the mission of walking in the space.Astronaut Zhigang Zhai is the first one who walks for the first ‘Space step’.All the Chinese were excited at that time.The whole country is proud of the three men--the first three men who presented China to walk into the space and finish the dream of us for many years.
In short,China is not able to say a few hundred words clear.If you are interested are welcome to China.
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About China
China has 9.6 millions square kilometers,the population of 1.3 billions,is the world's most populous country.
China [has] a very long history of the country.For foreigners,it is a very secret place,If you want to come to China for travel,you will be very rush to go every place because you [may want to see more places in a short time].
China has five [thousand years'] history.First Chinese Emperor was a cruel ruler who readily killed or banished those who opposed him or his ideas.He is notorious for burning virtually all the books that remained from previous regimes.He even banned scholarly discussions of the past.
Over the past several thousand years,[it] have taken great changes in China.The original feudal system has disappeared.Now people are free to talk,and not have to worry about such an indelible all the books were burned and the learned [was] buried.
Tea culture is one of the common traits shared by all the 56 [peoples] in China.Many Chinese people believe that a day is not perfect without a cup of tea.Either on the warm southern mountain area or on the frozen northern grassland.
China is developing science and technology in these years.It's the night of 25th of September,2008.After Shenzhou VII took off successfully,an astronaut would go out of cabin to follow out the mission of walking in the space.Astronaut Zhigang Zhai is the first [person] who walks for the first ‘Space step’.All [of] the Chinese were excited at that time.The whole country is proud of [these] three men--the first three men who presented China to walk into the space and finish the dream of us for many years.
In short,China is not able to say a few hundred words clear.If you are interested [in it],welcome to China.