英语帝帮我看看这篇作文的语法问题和表达不当之处

英语帝帮我看看这篇作文的语法问题和表达不当之处
The table shows the percentage of expenditure on three categories in consumable in five European countries in 2002.
In Turkey,about the third expenditure was spent on food,drinks and tobacco,which took up the largest share in the five countries,followed by Ireland with 28.91%.The percentages of the remaining countries were pretty similar (18.80% in Spain,16.36% in Italy,15.77% in Sweden).
Refer to clothing and footwear,it seems that Italian prefer to buy these two items than the other countries,which cost them 9.00% in their spending.And around 6.5% money was consumed by Turkey,Spain and Ireland.Swedish people once again showed the least favor on the two goods like the former ones,with a percentage of 5.40%.
However,it is shocked that relatively less money was spent on leisure and education compared with other two categories.The country that devoted the largest percentage in expenditure was Turkey,with a figure of 4.35%,which was only 1.98% in Spain who stood in the last place.
Overall,food,drinks and tobacco was a principal daily spending in the five countries in 2002,more money supposed to devote into leisure and education.

翻译得很不错.尤其是你认真诚恳的态度,让人不能不回答,更不能不认真回答.
我比较确定的改动用{}[]标示.感觉不太合适但又不知如何改处加?
只是个人看法,仅共参考.希望对你有所帮助.有疑问亦可QQ我.讨论哈.
The table shows the percentage of expenditure on three categories in consumable in five European countries in 2002.
In Turkey,about {the third} [one third of the] expenditure was spent on food,drinks and tobacco,which took up the largest share in the five countries,followed by Ireland with 28.91%.The percentages of the remaining countries were pretty similar (18.80% in Spain,16.36% in Italy,15.77% in Sweden).
{Refer to} [As to] clothing and footwear,it seems that {Italian prefer to buy these two items than the other countries?},which cost them 9.00% in their spending.And around 6.5% [of] money was consumed by {Turkey,Spain and Ireland?each of them?}.Swedish people once again showed the least favor on [in] the two goods like the former ones,with a percentage of 5.40%.
However,it is shocked that relatively less money was spent on leisure and education compared with other two categories.The country that devoted the largest {percentage in} [percent of] expenditure [in this category] was Turkey,with a figure of 4.35%,which was only 1.98% in Spain who stood in the last place.
{Overall} [In summary],food,drinks and tobacco was a principal daily spending in the five countries in 2002,[though] more money [was] supposed to devote {into} [to] leisure and education.