哪位大神能够帮我看一下这篇文章,纠正一下里面的语法错误,小的这里叩谢了~

哪位大神能够帮我看一下这篇文章,纠正一下里面的语法错误,小的这里叩谢了~
Internet isbecoming a dominant element in modern life
In my opinion,modern life always changes by new scientific and technological inventions,itseems very obvious that the Internet is one of those inventions.But like acoin has two sides,the Internet also bring both positive and negative influence.
As we know:in the old days,if you were far away from home----- perhaps study or work outside----- and you want to know how was your family numbers or you want to
share your days,moods with them,you may need to wait for months even years to
get letters from home,but now thanks to the Internet all those just need a click.Through the Internet we can talk and sow each other,it help people keep in touch with friends and family.
Even though,the Internet makes communicate more conveniently,but it also bring negative influence,such as computer games----especially for teen-agers---- always waste to much time.Students absent their classes just for going to the Internet bar.
It even has many unsavory material available on the Internet,like pictures and movies.
All in all,people have love-hate relationship with the Internet,I would like to say:theInternet was still a useful invent,it just need rational management.

第一句没错,下面有错的地方都用中括号括起来改过了..
In my opinion,modern life [is] always [changed] by new scientific and technological inventions,[and] it seems very [obviously] that the Internet is one of those inventions.But [as] a coin has two sides,the Internet also [brings] both positive and negative [influences].
----- perhaps [studying] or [working] outside----- and you [wanted] to know how was your family numbers or you [wanted] to share your days [and] moods with them,you [might] need to wait for months even years to get letters from home[.But] now thanks to the Internet [,] all [you need is just] a click.Through the Internet we can talk and sow[?] each other,it [helps] people keep in touch with friends and family.
[The] Internet makes [communication] more [convenient],but it also [brings] negative [influences.For examples,some people always waste too much time on computer games,especially teenagers.] Students [are] absent [from] their classes just for going to the Internet bar.
[There are even] many unsavory [materials] available on the Internet,like pictures and movies.
All in all,people have [a] love-hate relationship with the Internet[.] I would like to say:the Internet [is] still a useful [invention],[and] it just [needs] rational management.