作业帮看一下这篇英语作文怎么样（初三）
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看一下这篇英语作文怎么样（初三）
i'm proud of myself
要求：What kind of person are you?
What makes you proud of yourself?(give an example/examples)
Why are you proud of yourself?
正文：I'm hardworking,courageous and confident.I don't give up playing the violin though I'm in Grade 3 and facing the pressure of the highschool entrance test,which makes me really proud of myself.My school teachers always praise me for my good marks and my violin teacher often lets me play the violin before other learners to set an example.Praised by so many people,I feel proud.But it is my hardworking,confidence and the strong will of never giving up that makes me proud of myself most.
18分里能拿几分?不足之处?
i'm proud of myself
要求：What kind of person are you?
What makes you proud of yourself?(give an example/examples)
Why are you proud of yourself?
正文：I'm hardworking,courageous and confident.I don't give up playing the violin though I'm in Grade 3 and facing the pressure of the highschool entrance test,which makes me really proud of myself.My school teachers always praise me for my good marks and my violin teacher often lets me play the violin before other learners to set an example.Praised by so many people,I feel proud.But it is my hardworking,confidence and the strong will of never giving up that makes me proud of myself most.
18分里能拿几分?不足之处?
个人感觉15吧
内容不太具体,用词较单一,句式变化还行,有些错误,
举一例如
I don't give up playing the violin though I'm in Grade 3 and facing the pressure of the highschool entrance test,(which makes me really proud of myself.)不要写成一句,太乱
内容不太具体,用词较单一,句式变化还行,有些错误,
举一例如
I don't give up playing the violin though I'm in Grade 3 and facing the pressure of the highschool entrance test,(which makes me really proud of myself.)不要写成一句,太乱