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是一篇关于校园是否该对外开放做旅游景点的文章
Whether we should open school campus as tourist attractions? In campus tourism increasingly hot today,school campus whether it should open became the focus of the topic.
So, whether we should be college campus open?Some people think that opening campuses as tourist attractions is wrong.Opening the campus badly damaged campus environment and safety.The essence of the school is to give students a quiet role learning environment,instead of noisy amusement places.However, some people think that opening campuses can let students and social more produce exchange.Let the students to their study direction has certain cognitive.
I think the best way is to let both together.On the one hand may in students' vacation time opening campuses. In students' learning period close campus or opening part of campus.Such already can let students and society to produce the proper communication.But will not affect students' learning nvironment.As a new era of talent needed.Both only various, just can get good grades.
是一篇关于校园是否该对外开放做旅游景点的文章
Whether we should open school campus as tourist attractions? In campus tourism increasingly hot today,school campus whether it should open became the focus of the topic.
So, whether we should be college campus open?Some people think that opening campuses as tourist attractions is wrong.Opening the campus badly damaged campus environment and safety.The essence of the school is to give students a quiet role learning environment,instead of noisy amusement places.However, some people think that opening campuses can let students and social more produce exchange.Let the students to their study direction has certain cognitive.
I think the best way is to let both together.On the one hand may in students' vacation time opening campuses. In students' learning period close campus or opening part of campus.Such already can let students and society to produce the proper communication.But will not affect students' learning nvironment.As a new era of talent needed.Both only various, just can get good grades.
Whether we should open school campus as tourist attractions?此句话明显成分残缺,根本没有表达完整的意思.帮你改成：Whether we should open school campus for tourist or not is under debate.
In campus tourism increasingly hot today,school campus whether it should open became the focus of the topic.这句话改成：With the capus tourism increasing intensely,school campus whether it should open their tourism or not become the focus topic.
So,whether we should be college campus open?这句话改成：Then,how should we open college campus tourism?
Some people think that opening campuses as tourist attractions is wrong.你的介词用错了,不是用as,是用for.
Opening the campus badly damaged campus environment and safety.这句话改成：It is badly damaged the safety of campus environment for opening the campus.
However,some people think that opening campuses can let students and social more produce exchange..
Let the students to their study direction has certain cognitive.这句话明显的成分残缺,不完整.
这两句话改成：However,some people think opening campuses can make students get more social chance to deal with others and recognise thier study direction tendency.
On the one hand may in students' vacation time opening campuses.In students' learning period close campus or opening part of campus.
改成：In my opinion,it can open in students' vacation time or students' learning period close campus and opening part of campus.
你的语法需要加强,句子中有很多都不成句,句子残缺以及意思混乱严重.
个人建议：
你需要从语法看起,读,记,背,体会语法以及语法应用情况,了解句子结构（包括词性,成分作用以及用法,句子构成,从句,语法现象以及用法等等）
词汇量方面,需要多记固定的句子表达以及单词.
语音,多跟着书本模仿,当然英语书本的难度一定要与你自己的实际水平相一致.
In campus tourism increasingly hot today,school campus whether it should open became the focus of the topic.这句话改成：With the capus tourism increasing intensely,school campus whether it should open their tourism or not become the focus topic.
So,whether we should be college campus open?这句话改成：Then,how should we open college campus tourism?
Some people think that opening campuses as tourist attractions is wrong.你的介词用错了,不是用as,是用for.
Opening the campus badly damaged campus environment and safety.这句话改成：It is badly damaged the safety of campus environment for opening the campus.
However,some people think that opening campuses can let students and social more produce exchange..
Let the students to their study direction has certain cognitive.这句话明显的成分残缺,不完整.
这两句话改成：However,some people think opening campuses can make students get more social chance to deal with others and recognise thier study direction tendency.
On the one hand may in students' vacation time opening campuses.In students' learning period close campus or opening part of campus.
改成：In my opinion,it can open in students' vacation time or students' learning period close campus and opening part of campus.
你的语法需要加强,句子中有很多都不成句,句子残缺以及意思混乱严重.
个人建议：
你需要从语法看起,读,记,背,体会语法以及语法应用情况,了解句子结构（包括词性,成分作用以及用法,句子构成,从句,语法现象以及用法等等）
词汇量方面,需要多记固定的句子表达以及单词.
语音,多跟着书本模仿,当然英语书本的难度一定要与你自己的实际水平相一致.