初三英语演讲稿 急！我英语老师给我的修改： Good afternoon , ladies and gentlemen

初三英语演讲稿 急！
我英语老师给我的修改：
Good afternoon , ladies and gentlemen ! I’m Michelle from Class 5 Grade 9 .It’s my pleasure to have the chance to be here and give you a speech .Today my topic is “love”.
All people say that love is the most beautiful thing in the world. But I don’t think so.Because I have seen a movie called “He is just not that into you”.From it,I was surprised to know that love is very far away from girls.
Then one day I asked my parents:”What is love?” They thought over,and told me:”Honey,actually,love means you miss a person everyday, but it would not last long.So love doesn’t mean marriage.”
At present,I still don’t know what real love it is.I guess love is the biggest lie in the world.Isn’t it?But nobdy would answer me.Teenagers aren’t allowed to talk about “love”.But certainly,I’ll find out the answer to this question.
Love is beauty,but also is a mystery.What is the true love?Can you tell me?
That’s all my speech.Thanks for listening.
我在南非的同学给我的修改：
Good afternoon , ladies and gentlemen ! I’m Michelle from Class number 5 and in Grade 9 .It’s my pleasure to have the chance to be here and give you a speech about love.
All people say that love is the most beautiful thing in the world. But I don’t think so.Because I have seen a movie called “He is just not that into you”.According to that movie,I felt surprised to understand that love is very far away from girls.
I asked my parents that what love is in one day.They thought after a few minutes ,and told me that love actually means person miss other person everyday, but it wouldn’t keep forever,it can change quickly.So love doesn’t mean marriage.
Finally,I still don’t know what real love is.I guess love is the biggest joke in the world.Isn’t ?But ndobdy can reply me this question. Teenagers aren’t allowed to talk about love.But certainly,I’ll find out the answer to this question somehow.
Love is beauty,but also is a mystery.What is the real love?Can you tell me?
Thanks for listening my presentation.
我该如何取舍 或者说 如何把文章改的更好
有一个问题
I asked my parents that what love is in one day.和
Then one day I asked my parents:”What is love?”
哪个好

第二个.
个人认为,这样能够把问题的核心放到最后,加以强调,也不显得赘诉. One day作为状语,放在前面,这样也能够简略过掉某天这个不重要的信息.
总的来说,后面读起来也比较符合英语习惯.
谢谢