修改英语作文HOMEWORK:A letterWriter:Christine Bi YueDear Linda:Hi!

修改英语作文
HOMEWORK:A letter
Writer:Christine Bi Yue
Dear Linda:
Hi!Long time no see,what about you?I miss you very much.Do you like to live in Singapore?Summer holiday is coming to us.What about your holiday?Have you planed it yet?Now,I would like to tell you my holiday first.
I have a busy holiday.I must study hard because my mum let me go to many lessons and do much homework.So I only have a few times to play.I like playing basketball very much,but I have no time and no friend to play with me.What a pity!I have Physics Class at night every day.I don’t know how I can go there in such a dark day.I will feel afraid and alone.I don’t like physics,but I have to study it.Homework is much fewer than before,but I have fewer time to do it.Though my English Class has been canceled by my mum,I still feel tired and dislike doing everything.
Let me tell you something about my new school.I am now in Northeast YuCai Bilingual School in Shenyang.I am in Junior2.5 and there are 45 in our class.There are 18 girls and 27 boys.My dormitory has 6 girls.They are very friendly,but I will soon leave them.I miss them extraordinarily.Our Math teacher is a man and we call him Mr.Song.Our English teacher is Miss Yin and our Chinese teacher is Miss Wang.We all love them.My best friend is Alice,she is so outgoing that she always hit boys and they are afraid of her.
Who is your favourite singer?Still S.H.I like Jay Chou now.His songs are very beautiful.Have you listened to his Video called “Jay is on the run”?I like the song called “Rainbow” very much.Every time I listen to this song and I think about you,Linda,you are my rainbow all the time.Friendship is longer than my life.I have so many things to tell you,but I won’t say because I believe you know my heart.
The Olympic Torch has already came to Shenyang and all of us are very excited!The 2008 Olympic Games is hold in China and Shenyang is one of the division matching fields.So Linda,could you come back to here and watch the matches with us?Our school let us see the football match between Japan and Holland.Do you like football?I will draw some pictures about Olympic on my face.You know I love sports.
Shenyang has plenty of changes.For example:There are lots of tall buildings in our city.The environment becomes much more comfortable and cleaner.You can see a huge amount of trees in the north of Shenyang.I’m glad to see them because I really love things in green.Shenyang is becoming more popular and more beautiful.Plenty of foreign friends are going to visit Shenyang.
I hope you will write to me soon,Linda,and tell me all about yourself.
Best wishes,
Christine

1.coming to us 可改为“around the corner,upon us,drawing near''更地道
2.I would like to tell you my holiday first改为I’m writing to share my happy holidays.
3.go to 改为attend
4.太复杂了加一点连接词,如：you know,as a result,in all,what's more,to sum up,in addition,moreover,next,then,at last.
5.句式太少,不要只以你为主语,可多用些物,时间eg:shenyang has seen the coming of the olympic games.
6.你的单词量挺大