英语翻译My name is ***.I graduated from ****school in ** Provinc

英语翻译
My name is ***.I graduated from ****school in ** Province.I am approachable and have affinity .As a girl,I am attentive and always pay attentions to detail.But my brain is often filled with all kinds of new ideas.While I am happy to accept the challenge to take on frustration and stress,I often experience life's ups and downs and learn to get along with myself through going long-distance running alone.Learning music as a regular after-school hobby has enriched my artistic accomplishment.
Paying attention to current events,some things without justice,equality and peace are touch my heart.For example the gap between developing and developed countries is becoming much wider.and China's social security system is not perfect.As more and more people devoting themselves to public service career,in general,the development of public welfare
Is the trend of world development.however,China's related organizations are short of resources,experience ,expertise ,rules and regulations .I will expand my international horizon,,learn about international trends,cultivate critical awareness and accept Advanced values.Such as
the concept of Concerned about environmental protection,development of low-carbon economy and the participation in poverty alleviation.I would also like to
Learning management knowledge and experience,especially mature management experience.
I will continue to improve the artistic quality simultaneously in 某某校.I will start to learn art because I think it can improve my ability in design.In addition,make full use of the platform for this international metropolis to take part in some social welfare activities will deepen the understanding of my moral and make some like-minded friends.Doing appropriate amount of part-time job not only make me Integrate into society,but also develop my own financial ability.I'm sure that the education system and resouce are keys to my goal,and I will never regret to choose X X shool with both of them advanced and perfect.
一楼为中文一稿 希望可以修改的流畅连贯，符合外国人的阅读习惯。

I am approachable and have affinity .
I am approachable and having affinity.
如果后面用have,就得在and have间加上I,为什么我也不知道.
As a girl,I am attentive and always pay attentions to detail.
attentive 貌似改为careful比较好.
attentions 去掉s.pay attention to 是固定搭配.
detail 用复数details .
But my brain is often filled with all kinds of new ideas.
brain改为head；去掉all；new这里用得感觉不大合适,建议去掉.
While I am happy to accept the challenge to take on frustration and stress,I often experience life's ups and downs and learn to get along with myself through going long-distance running alone.
这句问题有点大 前半句可改为
Of course I am willing to accept the challenges to face frustration and stress.
后半句改的话应为：I often go through the ups and downs of life and learn to get along with myself through running with long-distance alone.
你才多大,就生活的浮浮沉沉?太矫作了也太个人了.故建议去掉.
while 不知你在此是作何意?当.时候?还是然而?前者貌似不通,后者又连不上前文.
Learning music as a regular after-school hobby has enriched my artistic accomplishment.
enriched 改为enhanced比较好.
没时间了.就到这儿.