作业帮求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）
来源：学生作业帮 编辑：作业帮 分类：英语作业 时间：2024/05/13 06:59:25
求英语短文结尾、（关于艾薇儿）
Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do better" .The lyrics of the songs ris me up,and i've gained great encourage.
we have a similar character,she said "i
don't care what other people said ,i
just want to do myself ".i think so .
结尾给点提示吧?急、可加分.
Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well.Her music is great .When i feel depressed,i always listen to her music,for example,"freak out" ,"together" and "i can do better" .The lyrics of the songs ris me up,and i've gained great encourage.
we have a similar character,she said "i
don't care what other people said ,i
just want to do myself ".i think so .
结尾给点提示吧?急、可加分.
很多地方有点 Changlish,第一句就有毛病,Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada.She's my idol ,my hero as well,应该是在Canada后用逗号,直接Avril Lavigne,a wizard rock who was born in Canada,is my idol ,my hero as well.
至于,music用great,呃,不是不好,建议你再换一个比较小的词用,gain后最好再来个 from it.
最后一段,I am similar with her,我们有相同的角色这句话有点儿不合适,I think so 这句话用的有点儿假,可以写,
why not?we are the most unique people in the world.
其实结尾不必再写,建议你把中间内容再充实一点,因为这篇文章你既然写了这个结尾就已经完了,再写只会显得比较多余,所以充实一下中间,但看这篇文章介绍偶像太单调了,你可以再写一写你喜欢他的什么?
至于,music用great,呃,不是不好,建议你再换一个比较小的词用,gain后最好再来个 from it.
最后一段,I am similar with her,我们有相同的角色这句话有点儿不合适,I think so 这句话用的有点儿假,可以写,
why not?we are the most unique people in the world.
其实结尾不必再写,建议你把中间内容再充实一点,因为这篇文章你既然写了这个结尾就已经完了,再写只会显得比较多余,所以充实一下中间,但看这篇文章介绍偶像太单调了,你可以再写一写你喜欢他的什么?