作业帮一段短文,帮忙看看语法和英语运用谢谢
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一段短文,帮忙看看语法和英语运用谢谢
Nowadays,due to high study and social pressures,many kinds of addictions exist on teenagers.I don’t want to talk about the drug problem because I have never seen anyone drugging in front of me,but I experienced some of other addictions.For instance,I was addicted to fantasy novels and science fictions when I was in high school.Our study work was very hard,and there is almost no entertainment then; so when I first read a fantasy novel which was saved in an electronic dictionary I felt that I was in a magical world,and was having exciting adventures.Since then,I read novels on class,on the bed of dorm,or at everywhere.I even spent my study time to feed my addiction,and I also didn’t get enough sleep.Several days later,because my grades fell down,my teacher counseled with me for solving my problem.Fortunately,I overcome my addiction to novel 3 months ago through the help of an excellent psychiatrist.However,I had already wasted so much time as to fail an important test.There is another example of teenagers’ addiction; that is network game addiction.Zhang,used to be an excellent student,left school for playing the World of Warcraft.We were used to chat through MSN,he told me that his stress was too heavy to endure; he also told me that he like the unreal world much more than the real one.I know many teenagers have online game addiction,this has been become a serious social problem.
我想要让人帮忙看看写的有没有什么问题。不需要翻译。尤其是翻译器做的
Nowadays,due to high study and social pressures,many kinds of addictions exist on teenagers.I don’t want to talk about the drug problem because I have never seen anyone drugging in front of me,but I experienced some of other addictions.For instance,I was addicted to fantasy novels and science fictions when I was in high school.Our study work was very hard,and there is almost no entertainment then; so when I first read a fantasy novel which was saved in an electronic dictionary I felt that I was in a magical world,and was having exciting adventures.Since then,I read novels on class,on the bed of dorm,or at everywhere.I even spent my study time to feed my addiction,and I also didn’t get enough sleep.Several days later,because my grades fell down,my teacher counseled with me for solving my problem.Fortunately,I overcome my addiction to novel 3 months ago through the help of an excellent psychiatrist.However,I had already wasted so much time as to fail an important test.There is another example of teenagers’ addiction; that is network game addiction.Zhang,used to be an excellent student,left school for playing the World of Warcraft.We were used to chat through MSN,he told me that his stress was too heavy to endure; he also told me that he like the unreal world much more than the real one.I know many teenagers have online game addiction,this has been become a serious social problem.
我想要让人帮忙看看写的有没有什么问题。不需要翻译。尤其是翻译器做的
1.due to虽然有“因为”的意思,但并不在句首,而且该词组不是连词,还是改为“because of”比较合适.
2.high study 不是高等教育的译法哦,改为“further study,high education”较为妥当.
3.“but I experienced some of other addictions”因为时态和先前不一致,所以为帮助读者意识到这是以前发生的,加上“in the past years”之类的时间.
4.Our study work was very “hard” 换成“heavy”更好些.
5.there “is ”almost no entertainment then——was
6.I read novels ——用used to read更符合些
7.or at everywhere——or at everywhere I could
8.spent my study time to feed my addiction——to 不要,feed改为 feeding
9.overcame
10.my addiction to novel ——of
11.he like the unreal world ——liked ,unrealistic
12.online game addiction——have addicted to online game
13."and "this has been become a serious social problem——记住啊,单独起句一定用and连接.
2.high study 不是高等教育的译法哦,改为“further study,high education”较为妥当.
3.“but I experienced some of other addictions”因为时态和先前不一致,所以为帮助读者意识到这是以前发生的,加上“in the past years”之类的时间.
4.Our study work was very “hard” 换成“heavy”更好些.
5.there “is ”almost no entertainment then——was
6.I read novels ——用used to read更符合些
7.or at everywhere——or at everywhere I could
8.spent my study time to feed my addiction——to 不要,feed改为 feeding
9.overcame
10.my addiction to novel ——of
11.he like the unreal world ——liked ,unrealistic
12.online game addiction——have addicted to online game
13."and "this has been become a serious social problem——记住啊,单独起句一定用and连接.