作业帮15分的作文这样写可得多少分,跪求啊
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15分的作文这样写可得多少分,跪求啊
It was a nice day , I want to buy a gift foy my father to celebrte his birthday . At 8 am , I went to a shopping mall and decided to buy a watch . Then , I took subway return to home . there was so many people on the subway that just has one sit left . I feel very lucky . Few minites later , I saw an old woman got on the subway with two boxes and looked like pretty tired . When she came to my front , I decided to stand to let her sit . A bout one minite later , she thanked to me with a big smail , I felt very happy at that moment .
After that , I feel help others is a happy thing .
第二排的return改为returned
It was a nice day , I want to buy a gift foy my father to celebrte his birthday . At 8 am , I went to a shopping mall and decided to buy a watch . Then , I took subway return to home . there was so many people on the subway that just has one sit left . I feel very lucky . Few minites later , I saw an old woman got on the subway with two boxes and looked like pretty tired . When she came to my front , I decided to stand to let her sit . A bout one minite later , she thanked to me with a big smail , I felt very happy at that moment .
After that , I feel help others is a happy thing .
第二排的return改为returned
Then ,I took subway returned to home 既然前面没有用first,那么这里的Then就是错误的.还有标点符号后的第一个字母要大写.只要把事情交代清楚了,就可以了.如果有字数要求的,如100字,那么150字是最高的了,不用写得太多.